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User
Reviews 8
Approval 30%
Album Ratings 8
Last Active 10-02-14 6:34 pm
Joined 10-02-14
Review Comments 38
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 | Piglet Hey man, you're fine, keep up the work and pissing people off.
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 | Phlegm i think ur writing is fine... if you are writing just as a hobby then why bother trying to please the stale sheep that flock about this website. .... stay true to yourself and don't let the lame overcome ..... Peace
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 | ScuroFantasma ...i think the biggest issue is for your reviews. 2. Break up you pragraphs, it's much easier to read when there are eight smaller paragraophs as opposed to 4 giant ones, it's also more inviting whereas a wall of text can scare people off, or they won't bother to read it at all. And 3. Try to work on your run-on sentences and fix up your comma/full-stop placement. This was something else I noticed in your reviews that I think would make a big different to their fluidity. Hope this helps :).
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| ScuroFantasma Hey man, i noticed you've been getting a lot of criticism on your reviews. You're actually a really good writer from what I've read and it's clear you take the time to properly analyze and form your reviews, however, there are a few things I think you should really focus on in the future: 1. Shorten your reviews up. I certainly enjoy larg, detailed reviews and a lot of people here feel the same, but being concise is key and deliving too deeply into needless detail is where...
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 | Gyromania * long and the punctuation is incredibly awkward. brevity is your friend. try to write a concise review maybe around 1000 words (should be easy for you; your reviews must reach around 3000 words or more) and, if you'd like, i'll proofread it for you
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| Gyromania yo, if you want to improve, i'm all for it. i encourage it. thing is, you just said you're just now reading criticisms, well, that isn't true. you've been arguing with people throughout that entire thread, myself included. you clearly favour yourself in arguments which isn't always an issue, but you've been blind to the blatant help people have been trying to give you throughout the course of 7 pages now. i didn't neg and i won't, you're not a bad writer, your reviews are just wayyyy to god damn
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 | BMDrummer it's simple, write sentences that aren't 50 words long and organize your paragraphs to about eight sentences each.
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| BMDrummer "you know what your problem is, cam? your arrogance. you assume you can't learn anything from others, and so you'll never improve -- and trust me, you could afford to learn a lot based on this and your other 'reviews'." perfectly describes it
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| BMDrummer that doesn't mean you're a good writer
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| BMDrummer take a 6th grade english class and you'll be told that your sentences and paragraphs are way too long. don't retort with "this isn't basic english though", because that just shows you haven't learned anything
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| BMDrummer dude write shorter paragraphs holy fuk
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 | facupm im trying to be constructive, not offensive, just a recommendation because i know how people here react to those kind of reviewsi wasnt judging the content, but the format and display... do whatever you want, you're free to do it
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 | VaxXi Can you write a review and not a novel?
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| facupm dude your reviews are like a mammoths, try divide into paragraphs causeno one's gonna read that
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