Album Rating: 5.0 | Sound Off
Any feedback would be appreciated.
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Album Rating: 4.0 | Sound Off
considering that the summary is the first thing anybody will read, you may want to clean up any grammatical mistakes.
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Album Rating: 5.0 | Sound Off
Wow I can't believe I missed that. Edited, thanks.
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Album Rating: 4.0
A: this is not a 5
B: i only took a quick glance through the review and saw at least two spelling/grammar mistakes
C: multiple run-on sentences
D: not sure why "A" is capitalized in the second last sentence...
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Album Rating: 4.0 | Sound Off
...and a quick read through unfortunately reveals many more spelling and grammar problems. the sentences dont flow, making the simile stand out awkwardly. you could also get a little more in depth with the points you are making, especially if you are giving it a rating of 5, which would imply you have a lot of thoughts on the album.
at the very least just use a spell/grammar check in word or whatever, and proof-read your work. its distracting from the actual substance of the review.
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Album Rating: 4.5
Considering that this is your first review, you did a fairly good job. Have a pos, although you should clean up the grammar/punctuation mistakes.
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Album Rating: 5.0 | Sound Off
Do you mind telling me where?
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Album Rating: 4.5
"genre" is a style of music. "genera" is the plural of "genus," and I assume you were not referring to subdivisions of organism families.
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Album Rating: 4.5
"Building on the theme of a planet in turmoil and a dire end for us all. It is the only logical and mature progression for the band. More of an emphasis on atmosphere, tighter song structure and sound. The same band only better."
the first, third, and fourth sentences are all fragments.
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Album Rating: 4.5
"Standing out on top of the pile."
"Accompanied with atmospheric low-fi strumming that lure you into a false sense of security."
more
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Album Rating: 5.0 | Sound Off
Just a mistype I didn't pick up. I probably should have ran this through a spell check before I submitted. Lesson learned.
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Album Rating: 5.0 | Sound Off
"Building on the theme of a planet in turmoil and a dire end for us all. It is the only logical and mature progression for the band. More of an emphasis on atmosphere, tighter song structure and sound. The same band only better."
the first, third, and fourth sentences are all fragments.
How about
"Ulcerate builds on the theme of a planet in turmoil and a dire end for us all. It is the only logical and mature progression for the band. The album has more of an emphasis on atmosphere, tighter song structure and sound. It is an album from the same band, but only better."
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Album Rating: 4.0 | Sound Off
With their previous release "Everything is Fire" Ulcerate set a new bar for themselves and bands of the genre.
Standing out on top of the pile. Creating and intense brooding atmosphere while combining crushing drums with
dizzying guitar wizardry.
first of all, you could use some punctuation in the first sentence "release, everything is fire, ulcerate..."
combine the second sentence with either of the other two sentences.
"creating and intense... while combining"
change "and" to "an", and also change "while" to "by" or just re-phrase the sentence altogether, it reads a little strange
with while in there.
"The Destroyers of All" is no different. Building on the theme of a planet in turmoil and a dire end for us all. It is
the only logical and mature progression for the band. More of an emphasis on atmosphere, tighter song structure and
sound. The same band only better. The music paints a wasteland within your head and stirs up unfelt emotion. It's truly
a work of art. Every piece as chaotic as the next but crafted with such delicacy and care.
all of these sentences sound like little fragments or dot points that you have jotted down, then haphazardly thrown
together. there are times when words are just missing: "every piece is as chaotic...", "there is more of an
emphasis..." etc. also try using more punctuation to give a logical flow to your writing; reading aloud certainly helps.
"truly a work of art" is an awful phrase to use, but thats just my opinion. of course it is art, thats what music is.
im not going to point out everything, but please re-read your work and think more about how you are expressing your
ideas.
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Album Rating: 5.0 | Sound Off
Thanks for the input. I really appreciate you taking the time to help me out.
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Album Rating: 4.0 | Sound Off
not a problem
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not a 5
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Still don't know what to think of this
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the summary is still very clumsy, if you wanted some feedback.
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Album Rating: 4.5
it really is good for a first, though
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Album Rating: 5.0
Excellent first review, keep it up. Pos.
"It's unbelievably heavy and a negative experience emotionally."
The emotional experience is subjective, for me it was a positive experience.
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