figure337: Entered a riff writing contest

figure337 04.05.15	Let me know what you think!
TheSonomaDude 04.05.15	Damn, I want in. I've had so many riffs floating around up in my head.
ButteryBiscuitBass 04.05.15	Bit disjointed bro and not very memorable. Kinda just goes off on one without going anywhere. Try something more concise and punchy.
figure337 04.05.15	You have until the tenth of this month Sonoma! @Bisquit yeah I can understand where you're coming from although I disagree to that extent but I wrote it so im biased. thanks for your input either way!
ButteryBiscuitBass 04.05.15	All cool bro - I wouldn't listen to that genre of metal what I think that riff belongs in. Different strokes for different folks, just offering my two cents. It's well executed and played regardless of what I think of the style, so all's good bro.
figure337 04.05.15	Yeah I hear that. I'm picky as hell when it comes to metal. cheers
nakedwesmile 04.05.15	are we listening to the same thing?
figure337 04.05.15	um I would assume so :P
nakedwesmile 04.05.15	cmon dude, i can do more cohesive stuff with my dick
figure337 04.05.15	Would love to hear this!!!
zaruyache 04.05.15	I'd re-record that too tbh.
figure337 04.05.15	Yeah not the best quality but its good enough to make out the riff and honestly there are way worse quality riffs submitted. Plus, quality of sound is some what irrelevant to the contest.
TheSpaceMan 04.05.15	I'd slow down the tempo a bit or something idk it sounds like there are a lot of sounds crammed in to a small window and the timing doesnt make sense in my brain but then again I do not write music and dont even know if the terms I said make sense also sweet box fan I think i got the same one at walmart
TheSpaceMan 04.05.15	impressive playing no doubt though
figure337 04.05.15	Yeah I see what you're saying but unfortunately the rules specifically state not to slow it down. Thanks thats my biggest fan
TheSpaceMan 04.05.15	oh shit I laughed
figure337 04.05.15	I'm also a comedian to usually a crowd of one
ScuroFantasma 04.05.15	Sorry dude, didn't enjoy. It's not irredeemable, just some parts didn't really connect for me. Maybe reconsider how it flows?
tempest-- 04.05.15	"Let me know what you think!" takes none of the constructive criticism on board
FlyheadMetal 04.05.15	that was pretty bad
SpiritCrusher2 04.05.15	hahahaha jesus christ
FlyheadMetal 04.05.15	It was just very sloppy and like i think it was off a few beats.
oltnabrick 04.05.15	I would like to use this for the next Goropsy album
figure337 04.05.15	I have no idea if thats a good thing or a bad thing...
InbredJed 04.05.15	Need to check some RIFFS OF TRUTH lists to help you out bro.
ZombicidalMan 04.05.15	sounds like you broke your wrist
oisincoleman64 04.06.15	In all honesty that was just a bunch of notes thrown together
TedSchmosby 04.06.15	i didn't really get it bro. didn't sound very coherent to me
Gameofmetal 04.06.15	"takes none of the constructive criticism on board" well he isn't obligated to act on any of it, just to listen and consider whether he agrees with what they're saying.
figure337 04.06.15	I get it if its not their type of music but most of these comments just think the notes are random (which they aren't) its a bit disheartening but I did ask for this. Either Im delusional for liking that riff as much as i do or this was a bad place to bring it to.
figure337 04.06.15	Also the track could use a remixing/re-recording i admit
Final Origin 04.06.15	Listened to it a couple of times, my view on it is that it does not fit with the backing track. I think its asking for a more rhythmic approach rather than a riff that is very melodic, more palm muted/tremolo based riff. Some nice ideas within what you have produced, but for me it seems out of place with the track the competition has provided.
figure337 04.06.15	Thanks final. Thats more along the lines of what I needed to hear. Im currently working on rephrasing to see if that would help.
Final Origin 04.06.15	Good idea man, hope it goes well for you!
SandorClegane 04.06.15	There's just... no... discernible rhythm. yikes.
ZombicidalMan 04.06.15	Any rhythmn is almost completely absent, and when it is present you're not playing in time. Even if you played the exact notes from the video (which are honestly a mess) you need to practice with a metronome. Seems like you're aiming for Scale The Summit type riffs when you're either too inexperienced or just too rushed to play them. Just being honest, and as a fellow guitarist, I'm sure you could rethink it and re-record it to come up with something way better
figure337 04.06.15	I agree with you completely zombi. Which is why I spent the mean time reworking it and got a much better product in return. Ill post it here when its finished uploading
Aftertheascension 04.06.15	sounds like godsmack playing melodic death metal no offense
facupm 04.06.15	riff competition? nice
figure337 04.06.15	lol godsmack? I don't hear it but none taken
ScuroFantasma 04.06.15	Yeah post a link to the revamp when you do it man
figure337 04.06.15	https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W2AGCVVGxZI
figure337 04.06.15	^This is my final form!^
Aftertheascension 04.06.15	"lol godsmack? I don't hear it but none taken" it was a joke. godsmack playing melodic death metal. a joke.
ZombicidalMan 04.06.15	nope nope nope nope I quit
Slut 04.06.15	you can hold a guitar ill give you that. youre on the same level i am
ScuroFantasma 04.06.15	Dude no
ScuroFantasma 04.06.15	Started off alright, still out of time man, second half doesn't connect and doesn't fit the backing track
TheSonomaDude 04.06.15	The second one was better, I'll admit.
Archelirion 04.06.15	Better than the first one, but still needs some work. Do you use Guitar Pro/TuxGuitar for your riff writing? It can be handy for visualising any timing discrepancies; it sounds like there's a couple of notes, particularly in that mid-section, that make it not fit into an (admittedly fucking dreadful) 4/4 drum track. It seems that most are going for a Lamb of God/Pantera style thing with theirs, and although it's probably beneficial for you to try something different, it's gotta be more cohesive. Final Origin's right, try a rhythmic one - it doesn't have to be balls out ability if it sounds awesome.
tempest-- 04.06.15	lmao what the fuck i never listened to the first one but that second lol whats the point of the drums, youre out of time for the entire thing
nakedwesmile 04.06.15	listen to some Robert Quine to hear how anti-music solos are done https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rO5WF_0OnFI
TheSonomaDude 04.06.15	Pretty much
Ryus 04.06.15	dood
TheSonomaDude 04.06.15	Thought this was a troll at first tbh