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Is English your first language?

Album Rating: 3.0

Greeting, my English isn't that good I admit. I would appreciate if you can help me improve that reviews.

Welcome to the site, then! Just letting you know, you'll have a tough time if your English isn't that strong - the best writers aren't just fluent in English but are also very, very good writers in the language. Keeping your review error-free is one thing, making it good is quite another. That said, I'll give you a few tips:

Your language selection is somewhat off-putting. And, granted, you have to know English for a while to fully understand its nuances, but saying something like "arid conventions," while sounding nice, doesn't entirely make sense (arid is more often used to describe places like deserts than concepts - a word like "stifling" would make more sense in that context).

That said, you clearly know your shit (or at least are really good at pretending you do. Which is why it's a little strange to see actually good (if slightly rough) descriptions like "transforms into something that could have strutted right off of Justice’s first album; sexy, funky and swaggering under the heaven bound soaring synths" placed alongside blatant grammatical errors like "the songs abandon’s traditional song structure."

I don't know what you should do, honestly. On one hand, I feel like you'd have a good time on Sputnik because writing is super fun and you clearly have talent. On the other hand, I feel like you'd do way better on a blog of your native tongue (and I'm sure there are some like that somewhere). Whatever you do, I hope you keep writing - it's so much fun to write. Good luck, and I hope to see you around the Internet sometime!

Album Rating: 3.0

Thank you, I move to US this summer and I try to improve myself, and giving some help to a friend

I thank you for the answer

I wouldn't be as melodramatic as Brostep up there ;). Just keep writing and you're bound to get better over time. Improvement doesn't happen just so or overnight, it comes with experience. Make sure to read some of the staff/contributor reviews here - they serve as good examples of what a proper review should be like from a structural point of view. There's also a proofreading thread in the forums, where people will help you with grammar and spelling: http://www.sputnikmusic.com/forums/showthread.php?t=577035&page=11

Don't be discouraged, man, and if you love writing, keep at it. English isn't my native tongue either, and my first reviews here were horrible, but I took the constructive criticism others gave me and gradually got better. I'm sure the same can happen with you.