why do you italicizes the band name at times?
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Hahaha, because I carelessly edited this one. Thanks for pointing that out, Sam!
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Album Rating: 4.0 | Sound Off
Good review btw man, forgot to say.
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you are welcome sir good review
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Thanks guys! =]
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Album Rating: 4.0
This and the new Immolation comes out the same day, May 14 can't come soon enough.
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Great review as always. It's been too long since I gave you feedback, so here goes:
From what I’ve witnessed about The Dillinger Escape Plan’s newest album and its incoming reception, it seems what’s on many peoples’ minds is if the release will be “the one in which they stumble."
This feels just a tad awkward. I'd change "if" to "whether" for starters and see if that helps.
Your first paragraph seems a bit short. Maybe go more in-depth about what's prompted the mindset, why you think it's a bad idea, maybe start talking briefly about the album, something like that. It just feels like you were about to start talking about something and then, abruptly, paragraph break.
placed together for the sake of ambition
wut (translation: i have no idea what you're trying to say here)
delicate tweaks the band has installed
This is super super nitpicky, but does a band really "install" tweaks? There's probably a better verb somewhere.
but only to build up tension for the emotional passages.
I'd put in something like "they exist" instead of "only."
torn apart only to be cobbled back together in an incredibly meaningful way.
This sentence seems like something you might have written 6 months ago. It's fine, but I know you can describe it better than "incredibly meaningful."
pulls it onto the fringe of maximum potency, but in an unexpected manner.
See above. I don't really know what you're getting at.
it slows down. Very carefully, and imperceptibly.
Combine this into one sentence - the second is a fragment
expertly improved
I don't really like that adverb
More in my next comment
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"when does it actually come out, cause i don't think it will even leak"
we live in sad times for music when this is a question. - calc
so true calc
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lol
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lol - kill
so true kill
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getting tired of “Prancer”’s confidence
"getting tired of the confidence "Prancer" shows" would do away with the wonky stylings. similar thing with the next part of that sentence
The latter track is actually an interesting representation of One Of Us Is the Killer, revisiting the quirky pop edge of the band’s single “Black Bubblegum” and expanding upon it in a much more satisfying manner.
You don't really need the "actually" methinks.
The track’s more than five minutes long while lacking any obvious purpose, standing out in the pack as the laborious black sheep.
Rachel would have a fit if she saw this sentence.
The band’s fanbase lives for its quick thrills at hand, and the moments of the release demanding a lot of patience are bound to stir up less excitement than the speedy chops for which we’ve all been hoping.
Quite a good summary for the album, judging by the review. It's interesting, too - is this a good thing or a bad thing? It's difficult to tell, and it depends on the listener.
The band is still going absolutely ape*** with its music
Super-secret bypass-the-swear-filter-trick: sh[ size=2 ]i[ /size ]t (without the spaces)
Sure, part of the interaction likely had to do with the blood smeared on the vocalist’s forehead, but the show attendants weren’t familiar with how his band operates-- through outlandish stunts, complete musical debauchery and burnt drumsets.
1. The second half of this sentence doesn't really flow well - I'd try replacing the -- with a : or saying something like "operates - outlandish stunts, blah, and blah drumsets are the norm here."
2. What the actual fuck? Blood smeared on his forehead?
Really solid review, and as usual most of my comments are based around making the whole thing smoother. Your ideas are solid, and that staff tag next to your name is well-deserved.
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aww, so many comments in between mine
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Album Rating: 4.0
I would say well done for a really great review.... but it's just made me sad I can't hear this for 10 days now. Grrr. Good review though =)
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Thanks, Will. Love you! Easily one of the most helpful people on this site. < 3
Making edits now. And thanks JS, really appreciate it.
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Album Rating: 3.0
I like leaving the censors in. Makes swearing funnier somehow
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< 3 luv ya bby
and fish, it's only really funny if there are at least 4 or 5 swears per paragraph, otherwise I prefer the trick (or at least first/last letters, like apes**t).
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Will, I beefed up the opening paragraph. I think it does a better job of explaining the points I made-- wanna check it out and see what you think?
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That's a fantastic opening paragraph right there. Nice work improving it.
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Album Rating: 3.5
This reads like this will be another Ire Works-like release. I really liked that record, so no big deal, but it looks like the consistency on Option Paralysis is no more.
Guess I'll have to wait to see if I'm right or not.
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Album Rating: 4.0
Brostep, your critique's really spot-on. When my finals are over and I've got some time to write again, could I request you do the same for a review of mine?
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