Great review man, overall this is very nicely written and you make a lot of lucid criticisms. All I’ve found are some small nitpick-y things to fix:
> Smashing together the music that was popular at the time and metal together isn’t a new thing,
One redundant “together”
> Cohesiveness is just thrown out the window and while messiness can be charming in certain circumstances but this definitely isn’t one.
Need a comma after window, get rid of “but” and replace that with a comma too.
> Don’t worry the extremely forced, juvenile and edgy anti-religious lyrics show up here…
Some punctuation after “don’t worry” is needed, your pick. Oxford comma after “juvenile” (optional).
> Some may find this innovative but in reality it just feels like trendhopping to appeal to children, which does fit the embarrassing lyrics admittedly. It might not be but what’s worse, appealing to 14 year old girls to make more money or this being an actual genuine artistic expression.
The last sentence is a bit awkward because it’s not full, because “it” refers to the subject of the last sentence, and it looks like a rhetorical question which still needs a “?”. I’d re-work it.
Overall, this is quite well done for a lengthy review, pos’d hard m/
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