@gyro, I mean not changing something on a review that is stylistic is one thing, but using quotes incorrectly and capitalizing random words is not open for interpretation lol.
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Maddeningly frustrating? Don't you think you're overreacting? Stop giving him advice then.
He's only written 10 reviews. He'll get better with time.
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It isn't about getting better with time; rather, he should be not making the same mistakes over and over again when he's asking for constructive criticism. These are issues that if he fixed, it would dramatically improve the quality of his writing. I think Gyro is frustrated because he sees potential in helping him improve, and it is blatantly ignored every time.
I see where you're coming from too, Kriege; he is doing it for fun, but it doesn't mean that you shouldn't aspire to be better at it.
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obviously krieg's not accustomed to slightly exaggerating for emphasis. and how do you expect him to get better with time if he continually makes the same mistakes? you should see some kind of improvement in 10 reviews, unless he lacks the mental capacity to apply criticisms to his writing
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Obviously Gyromania's not accustomed to capitalizing the first words of his sentences.
I win!
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lol
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Album Rating: 4.0
@Gyo- I get what you mean man, i never had the time to fix them though, thanks for the constructive criticism.
@ToonDude- Read the last 2 paragraphs, It will say why it's a 3.5.
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Album Rating: 4.0
The Black Parade is questionably too be a modern rock masterpiece, that will forever appeal to younger audiences,
Very poor sentence structure here, I'd reword that.
The Black Parade is a breath of fresh air, it does have low points based on it's more similar actions, not using the versatility that Three Cheers For Sweet Revenge and Even I Brought You Bullets, You Brought Me Your Love had.
Again poor sentence structure here. Rewrite it to something like this "While The
black Parade is a very good album, it does have it's low points. It doesn't have the versatility that Three Cheers For Sweet Revenge or Even I Bought Bullets had, consisting of a monotonous tone to it." (It doesn't have to be exactly this, it's just an example.)
As for those last two paragraphs, they don't really explain why this album is a 3.5. It's basically saying "It's not a groundbreaking album," and that's not really saying much. You can give a rating of 4.5 and say that.
You need to expand more on the negatives. Talk about certain songs that don't pertain your interest/aren't very good. Another thing is that if the sound isn't anything phenomenal, talk about why it isn't. Those two things will definitely help you on your later reviews. You can't just say that this album isn't groundbreaking and expect people to believe you instantly.
Look, I'm saying that this is a terrible review nor am I saying that you're a terrible writer. Like I said before, it is well-written. You just need to expand more on what you're talking about. You'll get better within time, believe me.
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Album Rating: 4.0
@Toondude- you explained this perfectly, you're pretty wise bro. My structure is pretty poor i admit, thanks for facing out facts.. it really helped.
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Album Rating: 4.0
No problem. I apologize if I sounded like a dick. It's just the internet, you can't express your feelings very well on it :P
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Album Rating: 4.0
it's all good dude.
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