Album Rating: 4.5
well, there are a lot of instances where you string quotes together and break them apart with commas rather than full periods, or use what's called an "interrupting explanatory statement between two consecutive sentences spoken by the same person":
“Why the hell did I even invite him to listen to this with me,” I thought to myself, “I know this album well enough, I don’t need to do this.”
Little me looked utterly bewildered, “But The Bends is the best album ever.”
While these all still make sense to us as readers, they really need to have full periods before each next bit of dialogue, or must be written differently. For example you could write it like this:
“Why the hell did I even invite him to listen to this with me,” I thought to myself. “I know this album well enough, I don’t need to do this.”
Using a period as a full stop before the next bit of dialogue. Or in the case of this example still using it as one sentence:
“But The Bends is the best album ever,” Little Me said, looking utterly bewildered.
OR
Little me looked utterly bewildered. “But The Bends is the best album ever."
I know I'm sounding like an asshole, but you get the point. Still want to stress that the review is really great. Just that if the writing mechanics were impeccable, the quality of your voice would show even more.
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Album Rating: 5.0
All fixed, thank you so much.
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Album Rating: 5.0
"I know I'm sounding like an asshole"
^^
I can tell the difference between constructive criticism and assholery ("Wrong 'your', NEG"). You do not sound like an asshole.
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Album Rating: 4.5
oh yea, I forgot to POS ;)
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Album Rating: 4.2
why is this not flagged
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Album Rating: 5.0
Flagged?
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Album Rating: 4.2
read this review again and bumped this back to a 5
edit: flagged = featured review of the album
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Great album. Prob their 3rd best behind the obvious two
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Album Rating: 2.8
Fantastic review
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Album Rating: 5.0
edit: flagged = featured review of the album
^^
That'd be cool but a featured Radiohead review is a premie spot. I'm sure it involves months of debate.
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Album Rating: 2.8
Not really I got a Pink Floyd review featured pretty easily
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Album Rating: 4.0
and what a worthy review for that album it is
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Album Rating: 5.0
No joke, like, best review of The Bends I've read so far.
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Album Rating: 3.5
THE HEADSTRINKERS THEY WANT EVERYTHING
MY UNCLE BILL, MY BELISHA BEACON
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This is beautifully written
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Album Rating: 4.5
Great album, but i find it kind of repetitive...
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Album Rating: 5.0
Holy shit... how have I never read this before?
This was such a beautiful read. Super well done.
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Album Rating: 4.0
the two most dangerous words in the world: good job
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Album Rating: 4.0
this is a cool review, but its really confusing
if you really did brought your younger self from the past, then your current state would be much different. you and your younger self are the same person, of course, so your life would change if you when you were younger saw how you turned out in the future/the present, so wtf
or maybe im just overthinking it
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Album Rating: 5.0
I don't think it is supposed to be taken literally
His younger self is not actually there, but a spirit of him
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