poorly written? please point out grammatical errors seriously?
"Someone get Wade out of that friggin' water, or someone will make an album about it or something. Too bad somebody already did: Circle Takes the Square. Hailing from the home state of crunk and the cake-faced Little Richard, they decided to add some hardcore flavor to the good ol'/old peach state.
and that's just the first sentence.
edit: wow, hivemind.This Message Edited On 09.04.08
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Album Rating: 2.0
Too bad somebody already did - Circle Takes the Square, hailing from the home state of crunk and the cake-faced Little Richard. They decided to add some hardcore flavor to the good ol' Peach State.
you can use both and they are both passable
Too bad somebody already did - Circle Takes the Square, hailing from the home state of crunk and the cake-faced Little Richard. They decided to add some hardcore flavor to the good ol' Peach State.
why seperate the sentences when they do together? the hyphen is totally not needed
and the third one is another alternative,
man if you trying to dog on someone do better
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Album Rating: 4.5
If I had never heard this before all I would know about it is that you think it sucks, nothing of how it sounds. That doesn't help.
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Album Rating: 5.0
For instance, the “Gravity doesn’t grant me the privilege of failure” section in crowquil, it is literally a 180 degree turn within one second from a build up to a quiet section.
who do they think they are to do something like that?!?! bastards.
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Fail is fail.
http://www.shipmentoffail.com/wp-content/uploads/2008/01/failboat.jpg
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they really do sound like a bunch of angry adolescents screaming because mama didn’t give them their ice cream.
One of the worst lines in a review I've ever seen.
I don't really care much about the album (yet), but the review sucks. It seems like you're pretty much criticizing the album for being emo.
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Album Rating: 4.0
Strike 3! Atavalen you're out, next up to the plate as he readies his bat, Kattunlover69
hahahahahaha fuggin what??
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Album Rating: 5.0 | Sound Off
Congratulations! This was awful!
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Kattun doesn't know what a run-on sentence is... so how can he take criticism for something he knows nothing about, like grammar? Or emo music?
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Album Rating: 4.0
bad review is bad
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Album Rating: 4.5
I'm only going to comment on the review, which was bad.
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Album Rating: 4.0
All right enough bashing on the writer, damn. Good try.
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Hailing from the home state of crunk and the cake-faced Little Richard, they decided to add some hardcore flavor to the good ol' peach state. This sentence doesn't flow at all. The first part and the second part hardly fit together.This band really needs no intro, I am sure you all heard this band by now, whether you be a hip hop guru or an indie head. Should be "This band really doesn't need an introduction. I'm sure you've all heard them by now whether you're a...For instance, the “Gravity doesn’t grant me the privilege of failure” section in crowquil, "Crowquil" should be capitalized. It is the name of a song. For instance, the “Gravity doesn’t grant me the privilege of failure” section in crowquil, it is literally a 180 degree turn within one second from a build up to a quiet section. Remove "it" after the second comma. Then get rid of the second comma. Remove "within one second".While the lyrics are top notch, the vocal placements is poorly thought out. Replace "is" with "are".It seems they (both male and female) mainly scream and shriek out the lyrics without any melody over sub-par riffage as their main ability throughout the album while stopping at certain phrases and initiating the enjoyable female-male vocal interplay. Remove "out". Use a period after "melody". Then add something along the lines of "This is done" before the word "over". Then remove "as their main ability."That is both a good and bad thing, the vocals aren’t flat and they convey a level of emotion, but it isn’t necessarily intelligent sounding if you get my drift Remove "that" and put "this". Remove "both". Remove the comma and put "since". After "but" remove "it isn't" and put "they aren't".
I don't want to take up too much space so I'll leave the last two paragraphs. Hopefully you'll look them over instead of just fighting with everyone.
Edit: I didn't neg you. I think it's kind of over-kill at this point. You wanted to know about the grammatical issues so there are a few.This Message Edited On 09.04.08
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Album Rating: 4.5
This isn't neg-worthy and has that kattun comedy i love...i'll pos on all my accounts to get you back some rep (i only have one though sorry brother)...he gave valid points and i enjoyed the entire read nice work...all these new members steppin up on the person it's cool to hate...nice job cool dudes now i like you all
Review needs more kattun awesomeness near the end because in the beginning it's owning then bye bye ville...i'm on the verge of giving this a 5...you criticize it for building up to nothing and all of a suden exploding, etc. but i think that's what makes the album unique...prety impressive that you got that many negs tho, seems you may be one of the most poular members for better or worse
ALL I EVER ASKED, WAS FOR A CLEAN BREAK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!This Message Edited On 09.04.08
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Album Rating: 5.0
The drumming is most certainly not uncoordinated. If you honestly think the drummer gets off beat you know nothing of compound time signatures...The writing is decent but as far as a music review I think you need to research the genre and music in general a little more before you choose to review an album such as this...
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This isn't neg-worthy
it's pretty bad dude.
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Album Rating: 5.0
I'm late to the damn party.
Also, neg'd.
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Album Rating: 3.0 | Sound Off
You don't need to say you negged, it's pretty obvious everyone did.
And you people thought MY review was bad?
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There are different levels of bad. Yours was bad in the sense you didn't know what you were talking about, and kattun's is bad in the sense that it's shit.
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