This album was the shit back in middle school.
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Album Rating: 3.5
Maybe it's just me and personal preference, but the review is very choppy with the excess of "paragraphs" and quotation marks. I'd suggest italicizing things instead of "making" "every" "other" "word" in quotes. It's distracting and detracts from the review. The writing is fine, just be sure to keep an eye on proper capitalization and formatting with less-choppiness.
Instead of just putting a Pros and Cons section at the end, make the review more about fleshing out the points you list in that section. You attempted to do this, but it ended up just being short sentences put into a sorta-paragraph form.
Also, the personal stories are fine, but a good majority of Sputnik isn't going to want to hear about that. Try to stay on topic with what you're reviewing. Maybe briefly talk about the history of the band leading up to the release of the album you're reviewing. I review things for my personal website (not really for any reason) and I always try to give each review I write some life and its own personality. I used to post on Sputnik, but I haven't been doing much with music lately.
The last bit of advice I can offer is to take your time on the review. Track-by-track reviews are practically loathed on Sputnik and anywhere else, really. I made the mistake of reviewing an album in that format and it was a mediocre experience at best. When you set out to review the album, ask yourself why you're reviewing it. Is it because it's something you want to do? I always tried to be that "inb4" crowd who would review an album as fast as possible to get noticed. Not taking time to think out what you want to write will more than likely always bite you in the ass. If you don't care for the review, how can you expect others to? I can't stand reviewers who use the "Crappy review for a crappy album" line. It doesn't matter if the album is bad; that's no excuse to make your review sub-par with the work you're analyzing. You need to put your heart into everything you put out and if you take the time and actually truly care for what you do, people will tend to see your work as something better. Sorry for the wall of text, I'm just trying to give the best advice I can.
This http://www.sputnikmusic.com/forums/misc.php?do=bbcode does wonders for formatting reviews. Take time to make the review look pretty after writing it. A review that's easy on the eyes always gets a positive response, opposed to something that looks like it went through the paper shredder. Hope I helped, keep up the work!
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Album Rating: 4.0
"This album holds a lot of memories for me. Back when i was about 7 years old, i heard a song on a bionicles commercial that i thought just kicked ass"
lol me to. Still have mine with me
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Album Rating: 5.0
I think i'm gonna stick to track by track reviews :o i know some people dislike them, but i'm alot more comfortable writing in that format, i prefer it, and it's my review so i'm gonna write it the way i want it  thanks everyone for the feedback though!
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Album Rating: 3.5
I know I promised you real criticism, and maybe one day I'll deliver.
But to be quite honest, that's an awful attitude you have there. If you were seven when they played Move Along on TV, I'm guessing you're around 14-15 right now... so a freshman in high school.
Well now is the perfect time for you to break out of your comfort zone and go with a more fleshed out writing style. You're definitely free to review however you want, especially if it's just something you do for fun. However, reviews are good practice for writing, which in turn is good practice for expressing yourself clearly. Writing a TBT review means you don't need to structure your argument (because that's what a review is, right?) into cohesive blocks (i.e. paragraphs).
It might be tough but remaining in your comfort zone is a bad idea in probably anything in life.
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Album Rating: 5.0
@toxin.
I actually have to agree with you on that, i think maybe i'll do a little research and try to figure out how to write more coherently and fluently. thank you!
And btw i am 15, in my 2nd year of high school
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Album Rating: 3.0
Band got ruined by the radio.
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Album Rating: 3.5
sweet dig nononsense
@Alice, glad you changed your mind! Not quite sure where your writing level is currently (sophomore year for me was where mine took off, because I had an awesome but brutal English teacher that year), but I would definitely say to read the staff reviews on this site. They're all articulate writers and are great to take cues from.
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Album Rating: 5.0
@toxin.
Well i'm in grade 10 applied English, but i love writing, i take applied just because i dislike the way we learn how to write in my school. But ya i'll probably check them out lots thank you!
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every review for this album has under 50% approval
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Band sux
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Album Rating: 3.5
Well i'm in grade 10 applied English, but i love writing, i take applied just because i dislike the way we learn how to write in my school. But ya i'll probably check them out lots thank you!
I have no idea what applied writing is lol. At my high school we just had regular English and honors English in 10th grade. Writing is writing, and as long as you learn how to write (both in terms of writing style and in terms of content) it's fine. And no problem! Don't get too discouraged by the negs---most people here expect you to be writing at a college level and you're young enough that you don't really have to be doing that quite yet.
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Stab My Back rules hard
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In my opinion, this was a shaky review, but it was a great effort!
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Shutup
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Album Rating: 4.0
you shut up
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Album Rating: 3.0
band's okay becuz of nostalgia values
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Album Rating: 4.0
and Bionicle
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Album Rating: 3.0
I hate megabloks
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Album Rating: 4.0
Lego>Megabloks
Megablocks are just a bootleg version of Lego imo
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