Album Rating: 4.5

Idk I just thought genre had to be capitalized for some reason but thanks for the help

you think so Atari? Hmm, I like how it looks

like this viral:

http://www.bbcode.org/reference.php

and yeah no prob, i pod's, like your review style

It's a learning experience and u can edit the review as much as u want

yep

@chuck, yeah I dont prefer it but every one has their own preference

and also viral, to improve your reviewing, read lots of reviews, but mainly just reviews by good writers, so any staff or contributor will do

i just think use of bold makes the text look less bland lol

Album Rating: 4.5

cool thanks man ill fix it

great first review viral, im not sure i would like this kind of album but the review was very well written, good job! pos'd

Album Rating: 4.5

I'd give it a try man got some really cool riffs and thanks

Yeah, good review for your first. Got the point across pretty well and informed me of what I would be going into if I wanted to check out the album.

Pos'd it for you, keep it up.

"Formed in 2009, Heartsounds is a pop punk band from San Francisco that formed after vocalist"
maybe dont use same word 'formed' like that, just say 'Heartsounds is a pop punk band from San Francisco that formed in 2009 after vocalist...'

"go back to their passion"
re-live their passion, embrace their former passion, revert to type etc

"Heartsounds has improved in pretty much every aspect"
Heartsounds is an improvement over their debut in pretty much every aspect. (full stop)

"cohesive writing skills " (comma after this)

"she takes center" capital s on She

"brings a lot of passion in her voice" sings passionately

"Well there you have it." not needed

"while bringing in their metal roots" while retaining their metal roots

"closing track 'Nothing Happens for a Reason' doesn’t feel like a good closer for the album to me it could’ve been placed anywhere"
closing track 'Nothing Happens for a Reason', it doesn’t feel like a good closer for the album and to me it could’ve been placed anywhere

"would’ve been a better closer it starts with a sweet drum intro and the end is the band just jamming"
might have been a more fitting finale with the band jamming away at the end to bring the album to a close.

Damn menawati lol

Well it was the morning and I was feeling all bright eyed. Just trying to help. He may not agree with my suggestions but that's up to him.

I coulda just not read it and said 'good first review, pos'd' I suppose hehe.

Yeah I know you're just trying to help

Well-written man

pos'd

Album Rating: 4.5

Thanks for the tips everyone ill edit as soon as I can

Heartsounds is an improvement over their debut in pretty much every aspect, what is most noticeable is the dual vocals with Murray’s slightly harsher voice and Nichols soothing lines.

This really should be two sentences just because of how awkwardly it reads, but if you wanted to keep it as one you could say: "Heartsounds is an improvement over their debut in pretty much every aspect, most noticeably the dual vocals with Murray’s slightly harsher voice and Nichols soothing lines."

In fact that whole second paragraph is pretty poorly constructed:

The first track shows this off and also shows off the bands more cohesive writing skills, especially with Murray’s guitar work pulling off some technicality that wasn’t shown on the debut, using metal melodies while making it still feel like pop punk is damn impressive. The first minute of 'Race to the Bottom' shows this off nicely and a shredding guitar solo in a pop punk song is always very satisfying.

Overuse of "shows this off", also the first sentence is joined by so many commas...it could be separated into two, maybe even three sentences.

The rest of the review is decent, just try to expand on your view points more...it will give the review a more detailed, fleshed out appearance. For a first review this is good though, so I'll pos : )

Album Rating: 4.5

Didn't notice that haha thanks