It needs tidying up but the conversational style makes it flow nicely

that's why I usually stay away from reviews like convos haha, I end up talking in circles and losing focus

yes the review seems nearly as disjointed as the album it's describing

ugh I hate you so much alachlahol but yeah you're probably kinda right.


mind pointing to a specific spot or two that I could clean up, please? I'd appreciate it

hmm... it seems that as you were writing this review, your thoughts were running and made their way on to the page, you know what i mean?

- "It feel like a movie with awe-inspiring special effects, but with absolutely no plot to complement it (and I’m talking like, less that “Avatar” plot-line)."

not needed

- "And as much as I hate to do so, I can’t help but want for some semblance of the staggering atmospheric bliss of World’s End Girlfriend’s past."

not needed

- "Don’t get me wrong, there are definite moments of bliss in between all the madness."

not needed


those are some examples from the second to last paragraph. as Sobhi said, the review is very wordy. if you were to condense the review to a more bare-bones essay without all the 'stream of consciousness' comments, it would be more pleasing to the eye

You're very hard on your own work, man. The review feels a little baggy due to the length, but there's little here that's superfluous. You work-in simple metaphor nicely and vary the language throughout.

Bleeps and bloops don’t quite cut it when using onomatopoeia to describe the plethora of sounds here. From distorted saxophones and gliding string sections to electronic sampling galore, with seemingly-random piano melodies strewn throughout, it makes me wonder where Katsuhiko Maeda’s sanity went since Hurtbreak Wonderland.

haha that's actually kinda what I was going for, ala, but I'll change some of that, I was trying that whole stream of consc thing a little, but if it clogs the review then we have a problem. thanks for the help man

for example, the first sentence. Well well is unecessary, this is interesting is obvious because you are writing a review for it, and isn't it? is unnecessary because it is probably interesting if you asked the reader about it.

also i think the use of juxtapositions is incorrect.

to be constructive, try cutting off like 30% of the word count, but maintain all the content.

oops well that first sentence was a copy/paste type, didn't mean to put 'well' in there twice.

thnks for the help though, not sure I got 30%, but I tried cutting out a bunch of the stuff

wtf is this "report this post"

i've only heard the album that these did guys with mono...didn't think it was anything special

omgomgomgomg! ...I'm going to disagree with you.

i hope this to be at least a 3, one of my favorite artist

negnegnegneg

you didn't actually neg it though, you were just pretending

what a maniac

o man, u saw rite thru my act

what's going on?

not much Marvin just reviewing something that I thought was good but apparently everyone else thinks is excellent or something

It’s just as disappointing, fun, unfulfilling and incredibly interesting, as it sounds.

like I said, don't heistate to check this out just because some bullshit reviewer gave this a 3 (which is still 'good' by the way) there's tons of people out there that will love this

@review: you dont get it man