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 | Nespithe22 Passages and sentences that should resonate strongest, for example the excellent conclusion dont because I'm still trying to interpret the paragraph before. I feel the more literary segments would stand out more if you changed some of the run on sentences into shorter ones. Like I sa. Just my opinion though and dont mean to criticise a very talented contributor
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| Nespithe22 I do. The paragraphs now have a more natural progression which allows them to make more coherent points. I'm cautious to criticise because you clearly have an extraordinary command of the English language and an excellent vocabulary. Particularly when I'm a very rare commentator and haven't even had a go at a review. I did find the writing in this review, still a little bit purple and verbose. The similes and justifications arent always required and the
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 | Jots made a couple quick edits to that review. curious if you think the adjustments worked out
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