Crymsonblaze: | Sputnikmusic

Crymsonblaze 05.03.13	sputnik, the human potato ================= on a long winding beach a young thing sits it's full of elitism and full of shits the internet has known but it has never loved the sad young potato that was sent from above it lived in an alley for most of its life it struggled, impoverished every day full of strife but one day a blaze joined up on the site and the potato was changed on that very night a young handsome jester was the savior known but the others were jealous so they chose to disown they flamed him for choosing such a manly, proud name and failed to see the genius in all of his games the blaze scorched the spud and burnt it to cinders and built it back stronger to survive through the winters but then a man named malleus finally made his debut that's a dumb name for sure but the story is true he stroked and he stroked his ego, i think but then he gave up once pushed to his brink so the blaze became a fire and engulfed him whole it smoked him completely like mal once did with poles and so the great blaze spreaded far away but some say he returns every couple of days
Crymsonblaze 05.03.13	any c&c would be appreciateed
Eclecticist 05.03.13	I read roughly three lines and then lost interest.
Crymsonblaze 05.03.13	so... too complex?
MetallicOpeth 05.03.13	2/10 would never read again
sixdegrees 05.03.13	I cri evrytiem
Gwynbleiddsfang 05.03.13	tl;dr but good job!
Calc 05.03.13	2 rules your poem on the other hand... didn't read.
Necrotica 05.03.13	This is one of my many kvlt \m/ poems that I've written this year: Men so maleficent, poised to atone falsely beneath winter skies as the widow gazes; bathed in ice, this solitaire, familiarity in such unease Quindi lei è caduta senza tregua akin to Countess Bathory's final breaths against solid stone unable to dream once more mistress death departs no speech uttered in her sorrow isolated in such presence malevolent goddess attracting company of nearby ravens further despairing as we gaze about the hailstorm, bleak unforgiving, remorse is naught bathing in nautical twilight embracing dusk in respite dreams in bloodied nightfall to which the spectres congregate.
Necrotica 05.03.13	This is my other really kvlt one: Lament on truenorth field as such this snow defiled vast as sin hath carved the glorious skyline essence of enthrallment jetblack wings of majesty abandoned to mourn ev'ry dusk funeral embrace in Gehenna nichnytsia upon ebonied woods as Perelesnyk's graven allure designs the flesh upon which my spirit resides sorrowful torrents of the Vila sent to despair me as I walk impenetrable pitchblackness follows; the Velebit mountain far beyond me its lifelinks cry Živila, premila, Živila, premila abandoning the light sealed in flesh the lifelink is a dead art and sentience has vanished.
Crymsonblaze 05.03.13	thanks guys!!!! dam good critiques!!
YoYoMancuso 05.03.13	1/5 would not bang
Crymsonblaze 05.03.13	i would!
Necrotica 05.03.13	No problem, Crym
Crymsonblaze 05.04.13	thank you guyd!