It's good to see you're moving away from TBT's already.
- First, always find a way to do spell check. The spelling error in the summary has people wary/losing interest before you've even started the review, and there's problems in the rest of it too.
- The intro....could definitely be better. Band info is okay but it's more interesting to open with something else, as long it's not something generic.
- Personal pronouns shouldn't be used as often as they are here.
- Analyzing each instrument is okay, but you don't wanna just say "the guitars sound like this" or "the vocalist does this". I did that for a while and realized it's better to not be that....formulaic?
- The ending paragraph could definitely be better too. You didn't really close the review, it just kind of abruptly ended.
I will say that this is a decent/fair amount of growth within the span of three reviews, and hopefully you keep getting better.
I agree with the rating but that paragraph about the vocals makes me wonder if we're listening to the same band.
Digging: Sole and the Skyrider Band - Plastique
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