RunAmokRampant - 2
I can't say anything else that Surtr hasn't already said, So just stick with his comment.
Surtr - 1
I don't think you needed to add swearing into this, I know what you're going for is ment to be shocking and swearing is a good way to portray this.
"But dad fucked away" really doesn't seem right at all. Better choices of words could be had here.
Other then that, I like the story and how it progresses and it only just edges out RunAmokRampant maybe because it was just a tad longer.
Guess this was a hard one to do since I can't really say anyones was really good. Hard word indeed.
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