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[QUOTE=BethanyLizard;18845380]what's wrong with it? :upset:[/QUOTE]

it's just not good

terrible use of commas

misuse of a few words

[QUOTE=NEEDTOPOST;18845418]it's just not good

terrible use of commas

misuse of a few words[/QUOTE]

my style is very choppy and uncomfortable i'll admit but what worcds did i use wrong ?

was thinking of turning this in to school tomorrow for a grade

rang

weathered


perhaps not strictly wrongly but definitely poorly

[url]http://youtu.be/6FEDrU85FLE[/url]

[I]the only thing I know is she got sex appeal[/I]

lol haz

and yeah i didn't use weathered poorly only rang

no you used weathered poorly

weathered implies degradation through age and use, that's the fucking word

you said that these cigarettes that she was just given yesterday from her brother are weathered

that's a fucking poor use of the word

i know what you're trying to say and you're saying it poorly

it's for english 2 im not trying to win a pullitzer

you couldnt even handle my more scholarly works that aren't about young girls smoking cigarettes

i dont care what it's for

when i'm right i'm right

and, further,

when i'm, i'm right

still gonna get an A cuz the teacher thinks im linguistically superior to the otther students

my english teacher says I write beautifully my gramma sucks though comes back with all kinds of red pen marks around it

ive got this one superbly well written essay about a girl smoking a cigarette in her backyard

I wrote an opinion piece to the editor as a black woman talking about slavery

I have a 1000 word short story to write but i've gone well over it has something to do with a guy waking up on an island in the clouds idk where i'm taking it

i should turn in one of my pre-written "bunch of weird shit happens in Eqypt" stories for the grade lawl

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whys this on my news feed

lol

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sometimes i get mad about not fitting into society then i remember fuck it i'm not missing much

sup guys

p sure the girl who was handing out chicken samples at the mall where I ate was a girl on okc

I told my friend "hey should I be creepy and hit on her like that guy justin does at laundromats"

yes she knows about justin

does she know about me

no she knows about sam (sam added her on fb lolz)

and justin

and uhh I guess mappy? i dont really know

tell her about me

what would you say

you're into suckin dicks

focus on my posting career

say something like "reading his posts is like drinking honey from rachel mcadams' nipples"

[QUOTE]focus on my posting career[/QUOTE]
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dude not cool

put her on

what happened w/ that okc girl dude

u pullin my chain

no thats not me thats

...um

just the wind...

yeah it's really windy down here

lol fgt

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says matthew boomer the dude who died his hair purple or some shit
i cant really tell

but i'm with you man i would've posted the exact same comment except i would've put real world in scares

:lol: alex

you missed the first part alex

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i rather agreed with that one actually

hungry and can't sleep

ugh

puking my guts up again