Dead's in it, so it couldn't be bad.

[QUOTE=Riva;15680073]Sure am!

I need food money for Europe. :([/QUOTE]
meh I think I'll ask for the german scholarship where I get 400 euros a month for staying a semester in europe

I'll cross my fingers

That's still not that much though. I'd earn A$300 a week normally, and living expenses eat up a lot of that.

[QUOTE=FatalEnergy;15680285]Dead's in it, so it couldn't be bad.[/QUOTE]

Is he one of the "zombies"?

He's DEADWALKING. Messiah bumps into him when they start doing it, but I can't remember at what time exactly.

The video is so awesome, I need hair like Messiah.

[QUOTE=Riva;15680048]I am good. Just enjoying my holidays and desperately wanting more hours at work. :([/QUOTE]

This makes me feel sort of bad for leaving work after only 8.5 hours today and only 7 yesterday.

[QUOTE=Monticello;15679988]guy should be detained.[/QUOTE]

lol He's just an awesome and hilarious MMA guy. I really want the full dvd of that self defense video.

[QUOTE=FatalEnergy;15680285]Dead's in it, so it couldn't be bad.[/QUOTE]

Newsflash: Dead sucked, horribly.

Mrh?

Dead is the one that gets pushed around 5:04... I think.

[I]When I opened the bottle and began pouring the poison in my veins
I didn't imagine I'd end up with the bottle lying broken on the floor
With confessions floating in the air about how I'm so insane

Those honest eyes disarmed my lies when they walked through the door
Stimulating a subverted desire to rant about chemicals in my brain
But once it started there was no end, you always wanted more

That’s why tonight I’m thinking of dying
Sometimes the truth is worse than just lying
Death is my constant mental companion
But to be honest I’m not actually thinking of trying
[/I]


Too cliche? Worth completing?

It's worth re-working. Some of the lines sound sorta awkward and don't flow with the rest of the poem, first verse especially.

[QUOTE=NemesisDivina;15680754]It's worth re-working. Some of the lines sound sorta awkward and don't flow with the rest of the poem, first verse especially.[/QUOTE]

This was what I was going to say.

It's definitely worth keeping though.

[QUOTE=NemesisDivina;15680754]It's worth re-working. Some of the lines sound sorta awkward and don't flow with the rest of the poem, first verse especially.[/QUOTE]

Yeah I edit at the end. Hmm, I suppose 2 positive reviews means I'll at least finish it. Thanks guys.

Scrap it I say, and come elope with me!

>_>

you would say that.


ps sup dan?

[QUOTE=Permanent Solution;15680788]Yeah I edit at the end. Hmm, I suppose 2 positive reviews means I'll at least finish it. Thanks guys.[/QUOTE]

I'm in the same boat as the others bb.

And since S&L won't help at all, could you guys critique for me as well!

[I]He slept through a madness of countless years.
He dreamt of towers and auburn skies.
Of raindrop opals and her coral bows.
His self-denial brought things so damn close,
To the resurrection, of all those simple things;
The rainless mornings and the restful sleep,
Nurtured faithfully in her pristine ways.
The foolish coward, yeah, he bit his tongue,
His realization; it's thrown away,
And through his fingers, he'll gaze in time,
To the dancing, of his swan,
Wrapped in plastic, and dressed in want.
It feels rewarding to know in days,
He'll wake up breathless inside a grave.[/I]

Cool poem, Mappy. (or are those lyrics?)

I think you could omit 'yeah' from the line [I]The foolish coward, yeah, he bit his tongue[/I] it disrupts the flow and doesn't really add anything.

I'd say replace the first few lines with "skeet skeet mother****er"

[QUOTE=Permanent Solution;15680731][I]When I opened the bottle and began pouring the poison in my veins
I didn't imagine I'd end up with the bottle lying broken on the floor
With confessions floating in the air about how I'm so insane

Those honest eyes disarmed my lies when they walked through the door
Stimulating a subverted desire to rant about chemicals in my brain
But once it started there was no end, you always wanted more

That’s why tonight I’m thinking of dying
Sometimes the truth is worse than just lying
Death is my constant mental companion
But to be honest I’m not actually thinking of trying
[/I]


Too cliche? Worth completing?[/QUOTE]

That sounds really Conner Oberst to be honest.

It actually does.

Who?

[URL]http://media.collegepublisher.com/media/paper657/stills/k9zswqd9.gif[/URL]

That's all you need to know.

[QUOTE=FatalEnergy;15681477]Who?[/QUOTE]

colossal fag[FONT="Verdana"]g[/FONT]ot that fat chicks in weezer shirts like to drool over

EMH, go look at Vince's Christmas list... that'll explain everything. :p

[QUOTE=EightMilesHigh;15681497]colossal fag[FONT="Verdana"]g[/FONT]ot that fat chicks in weezer shirts like to drool over[/QUOTE]

[QUOTE=Eliminator;15681486][URL]http://media.collegepublisher.com/media/paper657/stills/k9zswqd9.gif[/URL]

That's all you need to know.[/QUOTE]


No wonder why I didn't know who he was.

[QUOTE=NemesisDivina;15681511]EMH, go look at Vince's Christmas list... that'll explain everything. :p[/QUOTE]

Link?

[url]http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showpost.php?p=15666751&postcount=13[/url]

teehee

Hehe, The Red Paintings don't have a release called [I]Any Album.[/I] What a silly Vince.