Isn't emotion kind of the point? The reason I dislike Dream Theater is simply because their music may be amazing, but it has no emotion...Like I mentioned in one of my crits, like reading from a textbook. Besides, ones music is not a complete showcase for how much knowledge and skill you have. I design web pages. If I design a small, and straightforward site because it's all I want/need, does that imply I couldn't do more?

Look guys, we aren't asking for much, lyrically. I know there are different styles, different musical genres, blah blah. But somewhere we need to see something...I want to believe that there is a POINT to reading your song, not just because the rules say so. I want to enjoy reading your song. Having trouble with imagery? It's not hard, check out 'White Room' by Cream:

In the white room / with black curtains / near the station.
Blackroof country / no gold pavements / tired starlings.
Silver horses / ran down moonbeams / in your dark eyes.
Dawnlight smiles / on you leaving / my contentment.

I’ll wait in this place where the sun never shines;
Wait in this place where the shadows run from themselves.

You said no strings / could secure you / at the station.
Platform ticket / restless diesels / goodbye windows.
I walked into / such a sad time / at the station.
As I walked out / felt my own need / just beginning.

I’ll wait in the queue when the trains come back;
Lie with you where the shadows run from themselves.

At the party / she was kindness / in the hard crowd.
Consolation / for the old wound / now forgotten.
Yellow tigers / crouched in jungles / in her dark eyes.
She’s just dressing / goodbye windows / tired starlings.

I’ll sleep in this place with the lonely crowd;
Lie in the dark where the shadows run from themselves.

[QUOTE=super deluxe]Uh, I don't know why you think I didn't give you a content critique, because if you look at what I wrote, you'll see I mentioned it specifically.[/QUOTE]

I said nothing about you not giving me a content crit.....i said nothing about you giving a crit...where you gettin that from?

She mostly pulls it out of her vagina. The herpes may have hindered her reading capabilities momentarily.

And yes Minos, I have given up my title as challenge wh[I]o[/I]re. I'm thinking about downgrading to challenge prostitute-on-the-side.

DD you going to vote tonight?

[b]Tallied Votes[/b]

Corupt2057
3,1,1,1,7,7,3,8,5

Mr. Hankie
8,8,8,7,3,5,9,9,10,10

Disco Dragon
2,4,2,6,2,2,6,6,3,4

RunAmokRampant
1,1,4,6,6,5,4,7,1

6945
3,6,3,7,1,1,5,2,2

Rushfan2112
5,6,3,9,3,4,7,6,7

SeasonOfTheMad
6,5,5,2,4,8,2,5,8

super deluxe
9,9,9,9,10,9,8,9,9

jurialmunkey
7,2,7,8,8,8,2,1,1,3

addicted_tochaos
4,7,4,5,5,4,3,4,6

[b]Standings[/b]

Corupt2057
28/9
3.11

Mr. Hankie
67/10
6.7

Disco Dragon
31/10
3.1

RunAmokRampant
28/9
3.11

6945
23/9
2.56

Rushfan2112
41/9
4.56

SeasonOfTheMad
37/9
4.11

super deluxe
71/9
9

jurialmunkey
39/10
3.9

addicted_tochaos
35/9
3.89

[b]Final Ranks[/b]

1. 6945
2. Disco Dragon
3. (Tie)Corupt2057, RunAmokRampant
4. addicted_tochaos
5. jurialmunkey
6. SeasonOfTheMad
7. Rushfan2112
8. Mr. Hankie
9. super deluxe

[b]DQ'ed for next challenge:[/b]

Mr. Hankie
Disco Dragon
jurialmunkey

[b]Winner of Challenge 86[/b]
[b]Congrats 6945[/b]

wow I did better than I thought. voting was quite varied to say the least. Good job 6945

I'll save superD the trouble.

[quote=Corupt2057]
super deluxe - cute. referring to your crit on my piece, I think I would actually consider it a critique if you read for content and not just read for the rhyme at the end of the line. that's your downfall
Rank 9
[/quote]

She meant corrupt.

[QUOTE=Minos]I'll save superD the trouble.



She meant corrupt.[/QUOTE]


Thanks, Minos! :)


Now will you save me the trouble of telling DD that he's become an insufferable tool?

i'm sorry, this is going to be a stupid question, but what's going on here?! i've read through the thread, but i get the feeling that it's not what i'm supposed to do. you guys keep commenting on each other's lyrics (i think), but where can i view this?

i'm not a writer (of words) but i try to write on guitar. i found this thread interesting and would really want to find out more. please help