I'm out of practice.

*Pulls out The Cat In The Hat*

Don't worry about pulling out The Cat in the Hat, just pull your head out of your [I]a[/I]ss and you'll be fine.

I don't see where you're coming from.

[QUOTE=Rushfan2112]Super Deluxe
It’s a good thing we don’t use paper, what a waste of tree that would be! And you can think I’m a stupid ho all you want, I think this was crappy, and this takes up time and space…I mean, how crappy is that, why don’t you just not bother entering and save us all a little time…like me for instance, I could have said “this sucks” and left it at that, but I wanted you to read a little bit more just to be annoying…and I liked the word wanderlust myself…althoughactually, to give a positive, there was nothing wrong with the flow of your song…
.5/10
9th[/QUOTE]

Ladies and gents, we have a wiener! :smoke:

Wanderlust? What crazy cracker thought of that word? Glad I haven't read the songs, they are probably all very similar.
[quote]
I mean, how crappy is that, why don’t you just not bother entering and save us all a little time
[/quote]

As if that entire post was not a waste of time?

Anywho, guys, I apologize for my VERY long absence, I've been busy. I just moved BACK to california, had to get work, school, shelter, and car business worked out...I hope to consistently write again.

[QUOTE=Minos]Wanderlust? What crazy cracker thought of that word? Glad I haven't read the songs, they are probably all very similar.


As if that entire post was not a waste of time?

Anywho, guys, I apologize for my VERY long absence, I've been busy. I just moved BACK to california, had to get work, school, shelter, and car business worked out...I hope to consistently write again.[/QUOTE]

HAY!

And to think I was just accusing someone else of being you under a new psuedonym...

lol, no...I hate switching...I switched from NightFox long ago and that threw everyone off, lol.

you've never heard of POG?? Not sure if you're actually a devil dog now....

there are two types of Marines. The Infantry and POGs. Personnel Other than Grunt.

wtf, 6945, why does Minos = :angry:? I hate you.

[QUOTE=kevbutt]Super Deluxe
That was a bad joke. I think that it is unwise to mock Corupt2057's theme word.
10th[/QUOTE]

Paddling down the Nile, our tour guide spots another common sight, the male n00b showing off his interweb plumage. His earnest calls send females scurrying away, as does his evident lack of what is known in these parts as "humor."

[QUOTE=k.s.e.]you've never heard of POG?? Not sure if you're actually a devil dog now....

there are two types of Marines. The Infantry and POGs. Personnel Other than Grunt.[/QUOTE]
Yeah then I'm POG
I even asked a couple of the guys when I reported in at the beginning of the month what that was and none of them knew either, neither did my brother..
I don't think it is commonly known to none grunts
but you being a grunt I'm sure it is more common to you all
anyways take it easy

On a completely irrelevant subject, I'm going to see Al DiMeola tonight...I'm so excited!!!

[QUOTE=Minos]lol, no...I hate switching...I switched from NightFox long ago and that threw everyone off, lol.[/QUOTE]

Yay, Minos is back.

*dances round the room singing i'm gonna see the pixies*

This was song i found

F*** F**** F***
kill kill her
i like pancakes
STUFF ME IN A BAG AND SEND ME TO heck
i caught my wrist.....ow
now im dead
i hate you...
and, oh yeah,......wanderlust

in review of my useless rant, I hold myself in a higher regard then that, and have there for removed the rant, but to some up its purpose....

I am rather frustrated and confounded by why my lyrics recieve such poor grading....any assistance in helping me understand why my lyrics were graded lower then some other lyrics with....in my view....less thoughtful lyrics, and I wonder what you all look for in a lyric to be good, as I have writtent three pieces for competitions now that have been underscored, imo, and I am rather frustrated (with the crits, the grades, and myself)

I want to know what I'm doing 'wrong' so I can 'fix' the problem...

And as a final note I apologize for the rant that was originally in this post, you dont want to read it, and I am sorry to waste anyone's time who read it...

Your lyrics aren't good.

Sorry.

I think pixies may have just given you the best advice a person could.

If you're frustrated with getting bad scores, write better songs. It's really pretty simple. Don't gripe about it, just work on improving. If you don't want to do that, then I suppose you could just bribe all of the judges with BJs like super d.

..........on second thought, she hasn't won a challenge in a while.


.................on third thought, she also gives terrible head. Go figure.

so... has anyone read my song? whos the winner?

edit: im dumb, i see the voting thread now, i am new afterall (to this) my old account got banned permanently (thelizardkingcc)

anyhow, im gonna start doin these lyrical challenges pretty often, so you all will see me around here a lot. I hope the conversation gets better than the first couple of pages of this thread, I had to stop reading at page 3 cuz nothing was being said. Nothing of value or merit, just a bunch of trash talking between lyricists, which is just dumb.

6945. can you elaborate on your crit of mine? I can accept your opinion but I want to know why

Welcome back, Minos.



[size=1](The following information is only for the people that were 'confuzzled' by the the theme of my song. It's about building up an imaginary perfect person in your head. It's part of a concept album we're doing. Interpret it anyway you like though.)[/size]


Season of the mad, we get all whiny and bitc[b]h[/b]y ever so often. You'll understand it better once you've been indoctrinated thoroughly.

[QUOTE=Disco Dragon]
If you're frustrated with getting bad scores, write better songs. It's really pretty simple. Don't gripe about it, just work on improving. If you don't want to do that, then I suppose you could just bribe all of the judges with BJs like super d.
.[/QUOTE]

I had a witty reply, and then decided you aren't even worth it.

A reply? A bj? or both?

The voting thread is going to close monday about 1PM so everyone try to get your votes in this weekend I'll be gone but I'll get mine in sunday night
anyways I apologize for this challenges word
but I thought it would be more of a competition if everyone wrote about the same theme instead of just a more broad spectrum
anyways good luck guys

[QUOTE=RunAmokRampant]6945. can you elaborate on your crit of mine? I can accept your opinion but I want to know why[/QUOTE]

I spent about 1/2 hour with it yesterday and each time I read it, I got into it more or better....more better. If someone reads it once, quickly, you're gonna see crits like...it doesnt rhyme...and it doesnt really do the piece justice. It's like a k.s.e. song. You have to sit down with it, absorb it, to enjoy it. Drummergirl got really good with this style. Words that didnt necessarly rhyme in the classical sense but flowed, meshed and complemented each other. Look at you're first 2 verses:

strong,
weak,
redemption,
to me.

My pride is at stake.
unwilling,
of the,
consequence.
loyalty,
approval.

You're no drummergirl, yet, But I like where you're headed

[quote=super_deluxe]2 JurialMunkey- It’s true, it is so cliché. But the fact that you know that makes it somehow more palatable. You have some nice morbid lines in there, but I feel like you need another stanza in there to really develop a scathing moral of some sort. [/quote]

Thankfully someone got it. And actually gave some thoughtful advice. :D

Yeah, it's a work in progress..xxx Lots of bits not finished and a whole section to write lyrics to..x Theres a bit that has to go in just before the "at least i'm an important chess piece..." part.

[QUOTE=Rushfan2112]in review of my useless rant, I hold myself in a higher regard then that, and have there for removed the rant, but to some up its purpose....

I am rather frustrated and confounded by why my lyrics recieve such poor grading....any assistance in helping me understand why my lyrics were graded lower then some other lyrics with....in my view....less thoughtful lyrics, and I wonder what you all look for in a lyric to be good, as I have writtent three pieces for competitions now that have been underscored, imo, and I am rather frustrated (with the crits, the grades, and myself)

I want to know what I'm doing 'wrong' so I can 'fix' the problem...

And as a final note I apologize for the rant that was originally in this post, you dont want to read it, and I am sorry to waste anyone's time who read it...[/QUOTE]

You're not doing anything "wrong" unless you're trying to write lyrics to please others. You mention "thoughtful" lyrics. Maybe you're thinking too much. I seem to write best when my mind is calm, empty. I read you're last 3 pieces and one thing maybe I see is a pretty ordinary vocabulary. Some people just have a knack for "turning a phrase", one line that is original, unique can make an impression on ppl. I dont think you've developed that yet. "Mortal Crime" was thougtful enough. But, have you ever explored the map? Literally? Maybe you're trying to capture the essence of something you havnt experienced so it comes off a little flat. Just my thought on your ?
Hard to tell what people will vote for. Best to write for youself, write from your experience. You might try studing NP since you're a RUSH fan. I read his ghost rider book and the Vapor Trails CD took on a whole new meaning.

Heh, thanks for the advice man...I've read Ghost Rider, and have Vapor Trails...infact, being both a drummer and a lyricist, Neil's where I get a lot of my inspiration from (how do I say I'm a friggen fanatic without looking like a dork?)...He's a great writer, yeah...but he's kinda outta my league (part of why I like Rush so much)...I cant turn phrases like him, that would be crazy...plus, hes been doin what he's doin for thirty years...I haven't been writing lyrics for more then a year or so...but everytime i try to write something like that, it comes out very....teenager sounding (imagine that!)

thanks 6945 :)

Sometimes I like to rhyme especially for poetry, but I like to write lyrics for music more coz anything can fit with music.

[QUOTE=super deluxe]I had a witty reply, and then decided you aren't even worth it.[/QUOTE]

Darn the luck. But I sense that perhaps you took my comment to heart. In that case I ask............why?