[QUOTE=SubtleDagger]You're all fags. Especially kevbud.[/QUOTE]
Why's the sad look, Burt? :D

Hey, isn't it time already to close this?

Subtle, I'd like a crit.

[QUOTE=Littlejohn]Coming from the guy who has Muse and Tojes both in third place.


OHHHH BUrn. Even though I probably just hurt my placing...[/QUOTE]


That's called a simple mistake and I noticed it when I posted it but my computer crashed when trying to edit it so I fixed it up later. It's not like I intentionally did it to stir **** up.

And no I didn't change your placing.

[QUOTE=super deluxe]Your last picture was better.[/QUOTE]
[QUOTE]Why's the sad look, Burt?[/QUOTE]
I know, I'm changing it. It looked better on my home PC because it has a really dark monitor, but on my friend's the gamma is higher and I can tell it makes the picture look worse than it is.
[QUOTE]Subtle, I'd like a crit.[/QUOTE]
I have a lot of issues with your piece. A lot of the contextual grammar in the first stanza is nonsensical, for one (mostly at the end). The way you tie the theme in is done well, but it means absolutely nothing to me because it's imagery without relevance to anything else. The ambiguous names of people I don't know and have no interest in drag this down even more contextually. I thought a lot of the word choice, especially in the first stanza, was also not to my liking.

can we close this.

[QUOTE=SubtleDagger]Oh god, sorry, my friend posted that. Do forgive me.[/QUOTE]

wow you really are a dick.

[QUOTE=Muse_][B]WhatILiveFor[/B]- 6 This one read like a gimongous run-on sentence. You've got great ideas, but the presentation was too rough.
[/QUOTE]

One gimongous run-on sentence is called [i]flow[/i], which I really focused on in this piece. I wanted it to be that way. The rhymes aren't in a consistent pattern, and that was on purpose as well. It flows differently and more smoothly if you read it out loud rather than in your head.

But no matter, I don't mind that you don't like it. I just thought I'd comment on what you said, and tell you that you caught what I was trying to do with the "rolling" flow (if that makes sense) -even if you didn't like it.

[QUOTE=kevbud187]wow you really are a dick.[/QUOTE]
So's your "friend".
[QUOTE=pixiesfanyo]can we close this.[/QUOTE]
Yeah, someone tally.

TojesDolan 2.3
LittleJohn 3.8
cytoplasmicglob DQ
SubtleDagger 1.6
WhatILiveFor 4.6
Muse_ DQ
schwypees 6.3
ATC 2.1
WarLust DQ

Subtledagger wins.

I'm pretty sure my calculations were accurate.

3rd place, not bad. :D

See Burt? You win even if we disagree on your awesomness.

[QUOTE=pixiesfanyo]i don't think anyone has been here since # 1.

maybe BBB.[/QUOTE]

Nope...I started at #5. Jurial won #1 if I remember right.

nice lyrics guys, your all pretty talented :thumb: