I tired and failed miserably and then got very drunk instead.

that's about as cool as I get.

Saw a photo of a girl I was talking to today and she was wearing so much fake tan. She looked like a traffic cone. But didn't really notice in the dark/beer goggles

should totally write poems about it

[QUOTE=TojesDolan;15771295]I fuc‪ked and that's as cool as I get.[/QUOTE]

u got laid? woo go tojes!! :chug:

[QUOTE=Surf;15771269]I started work on something for it tonight, be good if there's alot of entries.

I'll hold off posting it in the main forum until after voting and stuff.

Happy New Year guys, anyone do anything exciting?

Edit: wtf minus is back - where've you been man?[/QUOTE]

I collapsed under the weight of my own poetic genius and killed myself. But I failed at that and have just awoken from a lengthy coma, mad poetic skillz gone. Glad to see most good people are still here. How is everyone?

New years was pretty great for me, I had a threeway... Kiss. So, no, not as good as Tojes. But it was 2 slammin hotties. Killer hangover though.

[QUOTE=Minus The Flair;15773681]I collapsed under the weight of my own poetic genius and killed myself. But I failed at that and have just awoken from a lengthy coma, mad poetic skillz gone. Glad to see most good people are still here. How is everyone?
.[/QUOTE]

yeah that happens every now and again

I need to get writing soon and get writing good. Short stories and poems. For some stupid reason I decided that I'm going to do a Creative Writing degree at uni. Must of been drunk. Need some examples of my work and whatnot though. If there's anything of mine you guys have been particularly impressed with then please point out. I havn't written in so long though, stupid.

I need to convert my English writing to non-failing Spanish poetry.

I'm about to start writing a song about my current problem, falling in love with an exchange student lol. ever know the exact date that you will Break up with someone and posibly never see them again? hard as hell.

I've written/posted something

It was originally for the challenge, but I couldn't get(and still aren't) happy with it.

Its about culture and national identity and stuff I don't usually wirte about. Like. Wales.

I'll do some real crits tomorrow

I neeeeed to crit more too.

My votes have been cast. Everyone should vote in the competition. Then enter the next competition.

Do it.

I will crit more, I may not be a good songwriter but I can analyse lyrics well so yeah.

I'll post material, I think. That makes me want to post more critiques.

[I]full[/I] critiques, at least.

tojes can you remove the thread i posted during a moment of weakness

ok tanks

We should have a thread just to post our favourite lyrics ever, could probably give people inspiration from having a closer look to a song's words.

There was a thread a long time ago where a user posted a well-known song and critiqued that like they would a normal song. It was quite popular for a few weeks then kind of died out. Guess it'd be worth resurrecting though. :)

I kinda did something like that, and now it resides in the 'how to be a better writer thread'.

Can I ask a favour of you guys? For my creative writing course I've got to complete a 'take-away exam'. Basically, they give us a premise and I have to do some writing on it, poem or prose or whatever. Will anyone be willing to look it over once its done and give some constructive criticism? I haven't got it yet, but when its started that;d be great....

[quote=Surf;15859408]I kinda did something like that, and now it resides in the 'how to be a better writer thread'.

Can I ask a favour of you guys? For my creative writing course I've got to complete a 'take-away exam'. Basically, they give us a premise and I have to do some writing on it, poem or prose or whatever. Will anyone be willing to look it over once its done and give some constructive criticism? I haven't got it yet, but when its started that;d be great....[/quote]

here, here.

Im really fascinated by the lyrics in Syd Barrett's (Pink Floyd's) Jugband Blues. I recorded my friend playing and singing it in 6th form and that was the first time i had heard it.

In a sense it ends with a kind-of-cliff hanger styling. Which i love. It's like "whoa...now what?!"

Must i NEVER forget the way the lyrics are peeled off the paper and pretty much draped over the chord structure. I try and "borrow" this style in my pieces.

What does anyone think?

[B]Jugband Blues[/B]

It's awfully considerate of you to think of me here
And I'm much obliged to you for making it clear That I'm not here.
And I never knew the moon could be so big
And I never knew the moon could be so blue
And I'm grateful that you threw away my old shoes
And brought me here instead dressed in red
And I'm wondering who could be writing this song.

I don't care if the sun don't shine
And I don't care if nothing is mine
And I don't care if I'm nervous with you
I'll do my loving in the winter.

And the sea isn't green
And I love the queen
And what exactly is a dream
And what exactly is a joke.

you can make a new thread about it y'know

Jugband Blues is a good song but the drums ruin the mood. It should've just been Barrett.

[QUOTE=Bordello;15863652]Jugband Blues is a good song but the drums ruin the mood. It should've just been Barrett.[/QUOTE]

as it was when my firend and me recorded his version. I know what you mean. often in cases like this when the solo work is more than enough we get something which we think will compliment the sound well when in fact it doesnt. ill start a new thread

I've got my exam thing today.

1 week

30 line poem on the theme 'discovery'

1500 word piece of short prose on the idea of change or something I didn't read that one properly.

I've got a week to do both and a short explanation essay thing. Should be fun.

wassup s&l?

im a realitvely new song writer and most of what i write is ****, in fact i don't even call the pieces i think are good songs

i do however have one question, why do most songs in S&L revolve around girls, love and/or hate?

i see it in what i write and i see it in the majority of songs written here, is there any reason for it other than the fact that they're the most dominant song writing subjects?

and, are there any tips to getting round this sort of linear thinking?

Because people have bad taste in writing.

I rarely write about girls. My last piece isn't about a girl, it's about dysrhythmic heart attacks and insomnia.

It's because the vast majority of writers in here are new writers, often heavily influenced by 'emo' bands and the like, who primarily write about the same subjects. It's a shame that it's the way it's got here, but hopefully that will change somewhere down the line. :)

As for getting round that linear thinking, I guess it's simply a case of broadening your horizons - reading a lot of the work on here from guys like Tojes, Slack, Surf and so on is a good start - it gives you an idea of the sorts of things you can form ideas from.

[QUOTE=Nightvision;15884786]It's because the vast majority of writers in here are new writers, often heavily influenced by 'emo' bands and the like, who primarily write about the same subjects. It's a shame that it's the way it's got here, but hopefully that will change somewhere down the line. :)

As for getting round that linear thinking, I guess it's simply a case of broadening your horizons - reading a lot of the work on here from guys like Tojes, Slack, Surf and so on is a good start - it gives you an idea of the sorts of things you can form ideas from.[/QUOTE]

Thanks...a load

Tojes, that song about Insomnia, if it isn't already in S&L, could you post it so i can do what Nightvision was saying?

thanks

No problem.

Just to confirm, I wasn't suggesting you're an 'emo kid' or anything like that, nor was I suggesting that all the songs that are written by bands like that are crap. To be honest, a lot of the bands I like are probably considered 'emo' by some.
Yeah, the suggestions for broadening aren't great, but it's one of the better ways of doing it. I guess studying the lyrics of bands/lyricists you enjoy is another way of doing it, and I don't know if you read much poetry, but obviously that's a pretty good way of doing it as well.
Even if it doesn't give you new ideas, most of the pieces you read on here can improve your writing in some way, particularly if you're just starting out.

Critiquing good pieces will help you as well, because you'll be trying to explain [I]why [/I]something is good and appeals to you as opposed to just knowing it is. This should help with understanding how to do that sort of thing yourself in your work. I know this way works, because it's the way I did things. There isn't a single person here that won't appreciate a few words on their work, no matter how 'bad' at it you think you are - at the end of the day, this is all a game of opinions, and everyone's counts - as an added bonus, a lot of the older school guys will usually return the favour on your work.

Hope that's cleared it up a bit further. :)

[QUOTE=Nightvision;15884786]It's because the vast majority of writers in here are new writers, often heavily influenced by 'emo' bands and the like, who primarily write about the same subjects. It's a shame that it's the way it's got here, but hopefully that will change somewhere down the line. :)

As for getting round that linear thinking, I guess it's simply a case of broadening your horizons - reading a lot of the work on here from guys like Tojes, Slack, Surf and so on is a good start - it gives you an idea of the sorts of things you can form ideas from.[/QUOTE]

I feel missed out. :(

lol

Haha, that's because you're a dirty Aussie. ;)

In fact, until I saw your piece this evening, I wasn't even sure you were posting work here any more!

Nightvision is a good writer too, young writers. Read his pieces. He's the man. [I]the[/I] man.

Indeed. I'm a cross between Shakespeare and Ghandi with the body of an Olympic Gymnast and the cup size of an adult male mountain gorilla.

lmfao

thanks loads, that post really does help me Nightvision, although my influences would be (mainly) RHCP, Pearl Jam, SOAD and Pantera, there are more but yeah, thanks a load

i always thought Anthony Kiedis was amazin' just for writing the songs on BSSM