I admit that Chino's vocals can be fairly impressive at times, but the rest of the band needs much work. I can appreciate simplicity, but you need to have something of substance sometimes. He|l, Jack Johnson is one of the most proficient at using simplicity to make good music, but I wouldn't say that he's one of the best musicians around.

Echolalia = Repeating others vocals after they havebeen sung? THat's what you meant? Maybe I'm just a bit... wooohh.hhh.

[QUOTE=Burt]Alright. This is getting beyond ****ing old.

Giggidy-giggidy-doo

/end rant
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He. I find it a little funny that for a second there, you took us (or at least me) for granted and actually thought we were (or I was) thinking beings (or being).

You, Burt whatever-your-last-name-is, are the best f[size=2]u[/size]cking writer around. Period. I can't really think of any song of yours that I didn't like. However, you, above anyone else in the world, should know that you'll be under the camera eye, because we all know you and what not.

What can you do about a bunch of punks talking trash about your songs? I remind you I'm only f[size=2]u[/size]cking eighteen years old. My attention foucs changes between por[size=2]n[/size]ography, boobies and vag¡nas. That's about as deep as I am.... Wait, I'm loosing my train of thought here...

Point is, I'm a little confused on why you made that rant there. I thought you above anyone knew the internet shouldn't be taken too seriously. NOW I'M NOT SAYING YOU TAKE INTERNET SERIOUSLY AND YOU SUCK, just claryifing that I respect your writing a lot and there's no real point of comparison between what you write. Different moods, different sources of inspiration. I should know better. I'll try and not compare older work with new one. At least when it's not about improving. :)

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[QUOTE=TojesDoLan]Blah[/QUOTE]
I made the rant because I seriously have been getting that same comment since I started winning challenges. It's getting old.

I know you guys like my writing most of the time, but just crit it for what it is, don't compare it to other stuff I write, because we're not having this big huge "best Burt song" contest.

[QUOTE=Disco Dragon]I admit that Chino's vocals can be fairly impressive at times, but the rest of the band needs much work. I can appreciate simplicity, but you need to have something of substance sometimes. He|l, Jack Johnson is one of the most proficient at using simplicity to make good music, but I wouldn't say that he's one of the best musicians around.[/QUOTE]
I think that they're pretty good musicians too. "Minerva" is aces. "Be Quiet And Drive" and "My Own Summer" aren't particularly hard but the riffs are great. "Korea", "Hexagram" and "When Girls Telephone Boys" melt my face off.

"Minerva" still gets on my nerves, if for no other reason that it was overplayed and overhyped upon its initial release. As for the others, your face must be made of wax.

Lies. "When Girls Telephone Boys" is like a frigging Converge song.

And Minerva's pretty. I don't listen to the radio.

Ok, granted they have much more diverse song topics than most bands do. I'll give you that. But their sound just doesn't do all that much for me. A lot of it is unintentionally (or intentionally) depressing, and the stuff that isn't, just doesn't tingle my eardrums the way I would like it to.

[QUOTE=SubtleDagger]Um Deftones are better than you.[/QUOTE]

Thats funny cuz pretty much anyone is better than you. If I vote you'll be last.

Wait a minute, who were you referring to there? Me or Subtle? If you were referring to me, you would probably be correct. However, if you were referring to Subtle, I'm afraid you're retarded.

oh god I'm sorry. A friend was on my account browsing the forums. I think he meant Subtle, but I'm not sure. Sorry for the trouble. Don't ban me.

[QUOTE=Disco Dragon]Wait a minute, who were you referring to there? Me or Subtle? If you were referring to me, you would probably be correct. However, if you were referring to Subtle, I'm afraid you're retarded.[/QUOTE]
Dont be a tool.

[QUOTE=kevbud187]oh god I'm sorry. A friend was on my account browsing the forums. I think he meant Subtle, but I'm not sure. Sorry for the trouble. Don't ban me.[/QUOTE]

Your friend is an idiot. Maybe you should get new ones.

[QUOTE=xKONRADx]Dont be a tool.[/QUOTE]

How was I being a tool? I commended Subtle on being a talented songwriter. So unless you're trying to tell me that I'm a socket wrench, shut your yapper.

such harsh words, why cant we all just hug?

[QUOTE=RunAmokRampant]Your friend is an idiot. Maybe you should get new ones.[/QUOTE]
Coming from the guy who has Muse and Tojes both in third place.


OHHHH BUrn. Even though I probably just hurt my placing...

Hey LCs.


I am going to try and enter the next challenge, since I'm on break and don't have to work on my thesis for a few weeks.


Now, please return to your regular drama broadcasting.

Did i really suck that bad? I'm f**king ashamed of myself.

You're all fags. Especially kevbud.

Oh god, sorry, my friend posted that. Do forgive me.

Your last picture was better.

[QUOTE=SubtleDagger]You're all fags. Especially kevbud.[/QUOTE]
Why's the sad look, Burt? :D

Hey, isn't it time already to close this?

Subtle, I'd like a crit.

[QUOTE=Littlejohn]Coming from the guy who has Muse and Tojes both in third place.


OHHHH BUrn. Even though I probably just hurt my placing...[/QUOTE]


That's called a simple mistake and I noticed it when I posted it but my computer crashed when trying to edit it so I fixed it up later. It's not like I intentionally did it to stir **** up.

And no I didn't change your placing.

[QUOTE=super deluxe]Your last picture was better.[/QUOTE]
[QUOTE]Why's the sad look, Burt?[/QUOTE]
I know, I'm changing it. It looked better on my home PC because it has a really dark monitor, but on my friend's the gamma is higher and I can tell it makes the picture look worse than it is.
[QUOTE]Subtle, I'd like a crit.[/QUOTE]
I have a lot of issues with your piece. A lot of the contextual grammar in the first stanza is nonsensical, for one (mostly at the end). The way you tie the theme in is done well, but it means absolutely nothing to me because it's imagery without relevance to anything else. The ambiguous names of people I don't know and have no interest in drag this down even more contextually. I thought a lot of the word choice, especially in the first stanza, was also not to my liking.

can we close this.

[QUOTE=SubtleDagger]Oh god, sorry, my friend posted that. Do forgive me.[/QUOTE]

wow you really are a dick.

[QUOTE=Muse_][B]WhatILiveFor[/B]- 6 This one read like a gimongous run-on sentence. You've got great ideas, but the presentation was too rough.
[/QUOTE]

One gimongous run-on sentence is called [i]flow[/i], which I really focused on in this piece. I wanted it to be that way. The rhymes aren't in a consistent pattern, and that was on purpose as well. It flows differently and more smoothly if you read it out loud rather than in your head.

But no matter, I don't mind that you don't like it. I just thought I'd comment on what you said, and tell you that you caught what I was trying to do with the "rolling" flow (if that makes sense) -even if you didn't like it.

[QUOTE=kevbud187]wow you really are a dick.[/QUOTE]
So's your "friend".
[QUOTE=pixiesfanyo]can we close this.[/QUOTE]
Yeah, someone tally.

TojesDolan 2.3
LittleJohn 3.8
cytoplasmicglob DQ
SubtleDagger 1.6
WhatILiveFor 4.6
Muse_ DQ
schwypees 6.3
ATC 2.1
WarLust DQ

Subtledagger wins.

I'm pretty sure my calculations were accurate.

3rd place, not bad. :D

See Burt? You win even if we disagree on your awesomness.

[QUOTE=pixiesfanyo]i don't think anyone has been here since # 1.

maybe BBB.[/QUOTE]

Nope...I started at #5. Jurial won #1 if I remember right.

nice lyrics guys, your all pretty talented :thumb: