[QUOTE=sr800bkBassist;13340631]Sonic Youth[/QUOTE]

That sucks.

Lawl. Drinking a bit of vodka. Nothing wrong with a couple of drinks on a school night. :D

Seriously, it's only about 3 drinks, which for me is about as alcoholic as a glass of water.

Spiff, I could use your expertise.

Would you be willing to give me your opinion on a thesis?

So guys, what's up?

[QUOTE=The Brad;13341051]Spiff, I could use your expertise.

Would you be willing to give me your opinion on a thesis?[/QUOTE]

Whoa... someone actually coming to me for help with something? That's wild.

I'll do my best to help, Brad.

And nobody cares about my opinion :upset:

Hey everyone!

[QUOTE=Ting;13341108]Hey everyone![/QUOTE]

Hi.


I am pretty exciting because my school marching band might get to play halftime at an NFL game.

Guess whos gonna teach bass lessons
<_<
>_>

[QUOTE=Ting;13341122]Guess whos gonna teach bass lessons
<_<
>_>[/QUOTE]

Tom Brokaw!


Oh wait...

Well you and your brother are apparently well endowed with writing skills, so here goes.

My concerns:
I cannot seem to get any cohesion or directness. Just really doesn't feel like a thesis statement to me, so any advice would be greatly appreciated.
Thesis:

Erdrich’s primary portrayal of Lyman Lamartine, the younger of the two brothers in The Red Convertible, suggests that he is happy-go-lucky and an all-around nice guy who just so happens to be unsuccessfully coping with the changes that the Vietnam War instilled in his older brother Henry. Upon further reading it becomes clear that Erdrich is writing about something much larger than Lyman’s attempts to alleviate his ailing brother of Post Traumatic Stress Disorder and nurture him back into the grave rhythm of reservation life. But rather than themes of fleeting fraternity and the intrinsic difficulties of maturity, Erdrich pursues the larger theme of the Native American experience in response to marginalization and assimilation. With this new perspective it becomes apparent that Lyman is not only flirting with Americana, but that he is fully engulfed and assimilated into white culture. Through his willful acceptance of white culture, he becomes detached from his seemingly native culture and forfeits his inherently stereotypical Indian masculinity.

[QUOTE=Ting;13341108]Hey everyone![/QUOTE]

Sup Ting

[QUOTE=The Brad;13341135]Well you and your brother are apparently well endowed with writing skills, so here goes.

My concerns:
I cannot seem to get any cohesion or directness. Just really doesn't feel like a thesis statement to me, so any advice would be greatly appreciated.
Thesis:

ladadadada[/QUOTE]
Well, I haven't read this book, so I don't entirely know. But you seem to be saying a lot, break it down as far as you can until it's as basic as it can be: What are you trying to prove?

That's what a thesis is. Don't write me a paragraph, just tell me what you want to prove.

[QUOTE=HELLonWHEELS;13341136]Sup Ting[/QUOTE]

Not much, going crazy on step mania, u?

Well prior to that my thesis was
Erdrich's portayal of Lyman suggests that he is not only flirting with Americana, but that is fully engulfed and assimilated into white culture. Erdrich also leaves room for one to believe that Lyman may in fact be part caucasian.

Basically, that still lacks direction and balls as far as "this is my thesis, this is what I am going to prove"
I am failing to make an argument.

[QUOTE=Ting;13341225]Not much, going crazy on step mania, u?[/QUOTE]

Well i was try to get a decent double thumb down and now the top of my thumb has no epidermis its just red and well i guess i can't practice that today.


If i want to mute the strings what shold i use. I tried using a sweatband but i keeps falling a bit too far

Okay, so basically, this guy is an Indian (right?), but due to his surroundings he has been assimilated and lost his roots. So prove that this Indian has been assimilated into white culture.

Yeah yeah, I know where I am going with my paper.
But the thesis meanders and lacks direction is what I was saying.

Maybe the class will have something to say about it.

sup dudes.

[QUOTE=The Brad;13341240]Well prior to that my thesis was
Erdrich's portayal of Lyman suggests that he is not only flirting with Americana, but that is fully engulfed and assimilated into white culture. Erdrich also leaves room for one to believe that Lyman may in fact be part caucasian.

Basically, that still lacks direction and balls as far as "this is my thesis, this is what I am going to prove"
I am failing to make an argument.[/QUOTE]

Don't try to make it as simple as it can be, type a complex-split thesis, this provides partition and analysis.

such as- "Politically, the war established the supremacy of the Republican party in national politics for much of the next fifty years. Socially, the war saw significant gains in African American rights. And constitutionally, the war established the supremacy of the federal government over the state. Thus, the Civil War did in fact represent a political, social, and constitutional revolution in America."

My thesis for an apush paper. It provides three different points in a more complex setting.

Try to type a gray area thesis, let it flow and don't think so hard on it.

[QUOTE=Worrpigs;13341383]sup dudes.[/QUOTE]

Not much, you man?

[QUOTE=ferdinand5]Try to type a gray area thesis, let it flow and don't freak out.[/QUOTE]

But sitting on the fence is crap. If you don't know what you're trying to prove, how can you write a paper about it?

He seems to know what he wants to prove, he just can't properly word his thesis... or so it seems...

[QUOTE=Spaceman Spiff;13341415]He seems to know what he wants to prove, he just can't properly word his thesis... or so it seems...[/QUOTE]

Bingo.

[QUOTE=Spaceman Spiff;13341415]But sitting on the fence is crap. If you don't know what you're trying to prove, how can you write a paper about it?

He seems to know what he wants to prove, he just can't properly word his thesis... or so it seems...[/QUOTE]

It is important not to try to write a thesis that is all "black" or all "white." The most effective essays attempt to navigate the "gray area" in a more sophisticated fashion. You stand is he got ingulfed in white culture, rather than keeping his indian roots right?

[QUOTE=Ting;13341390]Not much, you man?[/QUOTE]

same, just chillen. i feel good today, i dont know why.

I think my sister just invented the best muting system by accedent.

[QUOTE=The Brad;13341430]Bingo.[/QUOTE]

What I think you should do is what I said before, break it down as far as you can, try and say what you want in one sentence, then expand from there.

[QUOTE=Spaceman Spiff;13341483]What I think you should do is what I said before, break it down as far as you can, try and say what you want in one sentence, then expand from there.[/QUOTE]

As in break it down to atleast 3 topics, and describe them. Thus, Complex-split thesis.

[QUOTE=ferdinand5;13341468]It is important not to try to write a thesis that is all "black" or all "white." The most effective essays attempt to navigate the "gray area" in a more sophisticated fashion. You stand is he got ingulfed in white culture, rather than keeping his indian roots right?[/QUOTE]

I disagree. If you're trying to prove something, you do your best to prove it. What makes it most effective is if you can bring up counter-arguments and then refute them with evidence, which only strengthens your point.

That's just my stance because it's so absurd it's easy to make an argument for.