View Full Version : My first song - comments

11-01-2004, 11:42 PM
Uhm...this is my first song so be gentle, but any comments are well appriciated (sp?). Here's the link:


There are no vocals, because I can not sing. And please give a reason why you like/dislike/hate the song...

11-02-2004, 12:32 AM
pretty good for you first song. i loved the clean part but the lead with it did not go good at all. turn your treble down on your rhythm tone and turn some bass up. its was too trebly. good job dude keep it up :thumb:

11-02-2004, 08:45 AM
thanks :) . I'll skip the lead thing...

11-02-2004, 09:10 AM
Rocks harder than a Lapplander in an open bar!

11-02-2004, 12:13 PM
Pretty good, I agree about the lead.
It started off very Led Zep-like.

11-02-2004, 04:13 PM
yeah not a bad effort, got some decent riffage happening. and with your guitar tone, did you record direct into your PC from your distortion pedal, straight from your amp, or did you mic if off your amp ?

Sounds like it was recorded straight from a Zoom-type effects processor, straight into the soundcard. Very lacking in, not so much bass, but mid and low-mid frequencies. Way too much treble. Makes it sound tinny and weak. The riffs would SO much stand out if the guitars punched you in the chest rather than irritate the ears with too much top end.

Good work tho.

11-02-2004, 11:17 PM
I recorded it with a cable from my line out/headphone thing on my amp directly to my soundcard. And I had my Metalzone connected to the amp. I can't actually hear so much details on my computer because in someway, everthing I play through my speakers on my computer gets some sort of echo. Maybe I've ****ed the speakers but thanks for the feedback :)

11-02-2004, 11:39 PM
the lead in the intro was not very good. When the drums came in, that was NICE! I really liked that riff! If this is your first song written, then **** dude, you should continue to write music, because that is pretty impressive for your first song.

11-03-2004, 02:51 AM
it was pretty good for your first song. give you props man. it sounded good and i liked the intro and the lead. keep it up man.

Malakian Worshipper
11-03-2004, 11:59 PM
Despite its genericness, bloody brilliant.

11-04-2004, 08:53 AM
Thanks ! What is genericness? My english vocabulary ain't to good :upset:

11-04-2004, 09:30 PM
The part right after the intro, where the drums come in, is real catchy. Got some nice riffs in there.

Malakian Worshipper
11-04-2004, 09:36 PM
i dunno if genericness is even a real word

generic means that it sounds like it was really cheap to produce, which it probably was
but what im saying is that if it was produced a little better and with some vocals in it it could really go places u know

11-04-2004, 11:44 PM
yeah, I'm not to good of a producer, but that ain't such a big deal. I just wanted to see if the song was ok enough...

11-07-2004, 08:35 AM
that was SWEET!! sounded like led zep being molested by metallallica and megadeth having a feel too!!!......or something like that.

11-07-2004, 10:49 AM
sounds good to me!

11-08-2004, 03:38 PM
Nice as hell dude! when the drums came in it was f--king awesome! Some nice riff pwnage in there man! The outro solo near the end i didn't like that very much though, just refine that and it'd be an awesome song, also i think the drum beat needs a little variety. Overall great song!

11-09-2004, 08:56 AM
Thanks :) I'm not a great solowriter, I know. And with the drums getting boring issue: It's bloody boring to make drums in Fruity Loops so I just make them as fast as I can :)

11-09-2004, 02:15 PM
Thanks :) I'm not a great solowriter, I know. And with the drums getting boring issue: It's bloody boring to make drums in Fruity Loops so I just make them as fast as I can :)

Lol, yea i know what you mean with the drums in Fruity Loops thing. I really liked the riff though. How long have you been playing?

11-09-2004, 02:20 PM
Some of these riffs are excellent - you are very talented - well done

dave grohl
11-09-2004, 02:21 PM
thats really good!

11-09-2004, 02:26 PM
Thanks, all :) I appriciate every comment.

I've been playing for allmost 2 years.

11-09-2004, 02:31 PM
I suck at using Fruity Loops(mostly because i find it really lame to sit around and mess with a beat for hours on end), still a good program though. nice work for only 2 years too.

Priscilla Hernandez
11-09-2004, 04:59 PM
is random the definitve or a temporal title?

sounds pretty good. I play only keyboards and i'm solo act so i often miss to have a guitarrist by LOL
not really my genre as i'm a new age-ethereal goth dweller but well performed

11-09-2004, 05:36 PM
wicked job man.. im absolutely in love with the drums!!!! ILL BE YOUR DRUMMER!! pm me yo.. lol

11-09-2004, 11:36 PM
thanks again. The song doesn't have a title so I just called it "Random" at soundclick.

Shadows Rise
11-12-2004, 11:52 AM
Thats awesome.

11-14-2004, 11:30 AM
Never use FRUITY LOOPS you want drums thta aren't common you have to suffer. ALWAYS use soundforge, sure it's painful and long but hey it always sounds different. How do you sound different, you have to produce different. Genericness is when you sound like eeyrone else. Okay here's what you do write from the heart with all the feeling you got in you and scream you're guts out. That's how this songs going to be good

11-15-2004, 01:42 PM
the begining lead didnt go to well with the clean riff at the begining. At around the one minute mark it was completly awsome from there on out. Good Job

11-15-2004, 01:55 PM
The intro was good, but it got even better as it went on. I'm not a metal fan, but I could still appreciate the melody of the song, it was good. And I can't believe those drums are a computer program, when my band went into the studio the drums sounded worse than these!

Good job.