Album Rating: 3.5
@Kyle1221 The review's not bad. If you want critique, there are a lot of sentences here that start off okay, but by the end I'm not quite sure what you're trying to say. For instance:
"Life Is But a Dream… uncovers many topics of the existential corners of mankind told in a unique narrative, but in the process, undermines its own efforts to explore outside of what it wanted to be."
This sentence is super confusing. I don't know what it means for an album to "undermine its own efforts to explore to outside of what it wanted to be."
I *think* you're trying to say that the album is less than the sum of it's parts, that for all of its progressive posturing it comes off as kinda underwhelming, or something, but... like, the more I read it, the more that sentence feels like word salad.
It might have sounded better more like:
"Life Is but a Dream... wants to explore the existential corners of mankind, but its efforts are undermined by... [I don't know, but for instance] poor vocal performances and an overall lack of cohesion."
So if that makes sense... yeah, maybe work on that.
But this wasn't a *bad* review, by any means. Lot of good descriptions of the music, and the dying star metaphor in the conclusion is a good one 
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Album Rating: 2.5
Thanks wildinferno, I actually really appreciate constructive criticism like this. After rereading, I agree that there are sentences that don't articulate my thoughts as well as they should have- ending up in a word salad mess. Gonna look out for this moving on
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