Album Rating: 1.5

Yeah I have. What of it?

Album Rating: 4.0

Lol, sorry man. That one was for ShadowRemains.

But you can feel free to critique it.

Hmm. The review seems too (fake ex):"Doing (fill in the blank)... does (fill in blank).

Album Rating: 1.5

I pos'd. Not great but a pretty good review

Album Rating: 4.0

Too bland?

I guess too predictable. I'll pos though.

Album Rating: 4.0

I have been told my writing style is straight-forward, but uninteresting.

Album Rating: 1.5

"I have been told my writing style is straight-forward, but uninteresting."



Yes. Thats what I thought exactly. Try to make an allusion or something in the course of the review. Make it something that's enjoyable enough to read rather than just to the point. Hope this helps

Album Rating: 4.0

Then try my Black Tide review. It's about as interesting as it's going to get. There's a whole bunch of food metaphors in there.

Album Rating: 1.5

Lmao. I will get around to that

Album Rating: 4.0

one of those albums i enjoyed a lot more when i was 16 than i do now

Album Rating: 4.0

Thanks man, but don't expect to get blown away.

Album Rating: 4.0

and we welcome Sowing to the party.

Album Rating: 4.0

alright im gonna do something i haven't done in a while and dissect a review.



i dunno why there's nothing about you or the review that compelled me to do this i just got an editor's itch

Album Rating: 4.0

Love the feedback, go ahead. It all helps right?

Album Rating: 4.0

alright im gonna do something i haven't done in a while and dissect a review.

Album Rating: 4.0

Not worried. Even if it's all bad. I actually go around asking for this. Just this time Sowing bet me to the punch.

Album Rating: 4.0

Creative and angry shows Slipknot doing what they do best. The music is angry



time for a thesauras, no?



This makes for a positive approach to the album and allows the fans “maggots” to receive a release that is not changed too much from the last release, yet matured in a way that creates a maintained and interesting listen.



consider making it fans, or "maggots" in order to better distinguish that you are referring to a nickname for the fans. Also "not changed too much" sounds awkward, could just be "similar to"



There is much to be found here especially on the colossus title track ‘Iowa’ shows Slipknot at their angry best.



you kind of change tenses, or do something weird here I'm not sure what to technically call it. but it just sounds better if you put a comma after 'Iowa' and say showing instead of shows



‘Iowa’ shows some light, some dark layered in between differing levels of intensity.



works better without the comma and with the word and



Further developing the bands image



band's



Positively there are some levels of experimentation



there is no need for the word positively in this sentence, and if there is, it works better between the words "are" and "some"



self titled



self-titled

Album Rating: 4.0



Joey like before is still pummelling away at his extended drum kit,



"Joey, like before, is still..." sounds better because the commas tell the reader how to emphasize that part of the sentence in their mind



In fact:



Joey like before is still pummelling away at his extended drum kit, Craig provides the eerie backdrop for the tracks, Shaun and Chris are thickening the texture with the use of their added percussion, Paul Grey provides a steady bass line that at times is at the forefront of the listeners notice, Jim and Mick propel heavy riffs over the length of the album without any let up, Sid adds his level of creative diversity and interest with his use of the disc table and as always listeners will find Corey Taylor screaming his way through tracks but with the added clean vocal linings that are making a more noticeable appearance through the length of the album.



Holy fuck. Break this up. I'm not going to try to figure out a way, but a few periods would be a start.



The combined levels of texture reinforce the bands thick style



*band's



An album that shows interest but an album that is not without its flaws when listened in its entity.



You ended your review with a fragment.



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Review shows some potential, but is heavily weighed down by awkward sentence structuring. A few grammatical errors are also present, but they aren't so abundant that I would be worried. I would say this is a pretty basic user review, not better or worse than the average. You definitely show some potential with the way you describe the music, especially in lines like:



the ambient/atmospheric-like bass work of Paul Grey that darkens the overall mood of the album and creates a horror felt theme over the length of the album.



and



thickening the texture with the use of their added percussion



So I would build on those strengths, work on making your reviews flow better (maybe read it aloud to yourself a few times) and this would be an abover average user-level review. Hope this helps, didn't mean to nitpick, I just haven't critiqued a review in a long long time and this review was just in the wrong place at the wrong time (or right place and time, depending on if you percieve this constructively or not). Review Grade: C

Album Rating: 4.0

Thanks Sowing, like i said in the comment above, i actively look for 'nit-pickers' and i guess C is a pass mark.

I was a bit worried about my instrumentation paragraph, and i also don't know what to do about it (might just scrap it and start over). As for flow i some some real trouble with it (the pointers people give me don't seem to help). And those last lines you mention come from music aural training, and it probably doesn't help that i have no advancedEnglish/writing training.





"Joey, like before, is still..." sounds better because the commas tell the reader how to emphasize that part of the sentence in their mind



^your example, this your example of flow? I can see how that reads better.



Thanks for the Input Sowing.