Album Rating: 3.5
Not having heard VISITER, I am thoroughly enjoying this album. Though, of course, some songs are better than the others.
Also, Steoandnoodles, a very, very good review. I also appreciate how responsive you are to all the comments here.
Ask & ye shall receive...
Firstly, Stephen, you really have a way with words. Already, you are over half way to becoming a great reviewer just with that. Furthermore, your descriptions are rock-solid. I have never listened to this band, but your review gives me a great (ignore the oxymoron) picture of what the band/album sounds like. So well done on that too.
Now for some nit-picking:
- The review is basically a track by track. While it's a good one, it's easier than you think to structure it a different way & not have it be a track by track. Maybe group similar sounding songs, or similar themed songs. You can still touch on each track if you like, just not in such an ordered fashion.
- The review is ultimately too long. Believe it or not, this is about the length most of my reviews start at. Cull, cull & cull. It makes it much easier to read. Trust me, people would have skipped paragraphs on this review. This won't happen overnight, but with each review, try to be more and more ruthless until you get reviews down to say no more than 6 paragraphs. If my verbose self can do it, so can you.
- Many sentences read awkwardly. Proofread, proofread, proofread. Then, take a few hours away from the review & proofread again. You have lots of semi-colons, some short sentences with commas & some long sentences with no punctuation marks at all. It's difficult while writing, but later put yourself in the shoes of the reader. EG: 1st sentence of both the 2nd & final paragraphs.
They are probably your 3 main improvements to work on... & in a way, they are all linked. Improving 1 should positivily impact the other 2.