Wrote this for RYM so I thought I'd submit it here.This Message Edited On 11.11.06
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Nice work. This band sounds interesting
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the usual:
learn when and how to use periods
learn when and how to use commas
learn how not to construct sentences that aren't awkward
learn how to make your reviews interesting. Why is everyone so sheepish when it comes to criticizing? Are Eliminator and I the only two people who notice how mediocre this guy writes?
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Basically, this band is amazing. Im hoping to get this album and Cloak of Love for Christmas.
Good review, aside from a few grammer mistakes.
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I'm gonna have to agree with pulseczar on this one. Your review has plenty of detail but it was also very difficult to read. Commas were inserted in places were they shouldn't have been and your sentences show little fluency. I think you should read over this one and spend a little more time it, the detail was fine but it was a bit hard to get through. This Message Edited On 11.07.06
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A thesaurus would help also.
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Are Eliminator and I the only two people who notice how mediocre this guy writes? Eliminator lol.
Oh yeah, I wrote this for RYM without anything to help me =/
And Pulseczar, I understand what you're saying but you don't have to be so critical of me all the time
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this band name sounds like a bad german sci fi, good review too
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So I touched and edited this review up a bit, anyone help me with it?
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learn when and how to use periods
learn when and how to use commas
learn how not to construct sentences that aren't awkward
learn how to make your reviews interesting. Why is everyone so sheepish when it comes to criticizing? Are Eliminator and I the only two people who notice how mediocre this guy writes? Pulse, you should really give the guy a break. He's 16 years old and the main problems in his writing are grammar and vocabulary, that's hardly suprising is it? Derek puts a lot of effort into his reviewing, and sure they might have some errors, but he's gonna learn that in time. Maybe if you gave him some constructive points on how to improve the things you stated, he'd be able to work on them.
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I'm 14 Kyle :p
But thanks for sticking up me, I really do try.
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Wow Neoteric, I always pictured you as being much older. Youre my age :D
I can always tell that you really try on your reviews. And I always enjoy them, I just think your grammer is a bit lacking at times.
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Everyone I meet online say they always think I'm 16 or something along those lines.
And grammar has never been my best point but it's not if my grammar is so bad that it's impossible to read.
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Well yeah, I had checked on your myspace and it said 16 But yeah, that only goes to emphasize my point. Your reviews are great for your age.
/probably sounds really patronising.This Message Edited On 12.02.06
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Excuse me but i have been an avid Genghis Tron fan for a ew years now. I have been to a couple of shows that i have been able to, and the writer of this review, at his age, has no real grasp of context inside this music. I agree with most of what he is saying, and if you wish to complain about grammar then please, jog on. What is missing is the ordascity and energy this band has. Its more about expressing energy and power, and minipulating this with more functional melodic tones. Giving a pleasant listen. Now please go blab on about how this album is pathetic, or amazing, but you have no grasp of "grindcore" and what it is about. This album is venturing so far into grind, pushing boundaries, seeing what can be reached and how it is taken by a viewing public. You will all probably grow up and move on and within a year this "grind" will be nothing but a racket to your melodic indie shite. If you are an avid grind fan, and aren't just in it because its "scene" or "cool" then you will realise the brutality and sheer magnifisence of this album.
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You will all probably grow up and move on and within a year this "grind" will be nothing but a racket to your melodic indie shite. If you are an avid grind fan, and aren't just in it because its "scene" or "cool" then you will realise the brutality and sheer magnifisence of this album.
um, no one even said anything negative about this album.
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Uhh.. MilesGeorge, what the hell are you going on about?
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Album Rating: 3.0
DEEEEP
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lol
but really, i've "rediscovered" this album and it is genius
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Album Rating: 3.5
From The Aisle
yup
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