 |
|
|||
|
| |||
10-18-2005, 03:38 PM
|
#1 |
|
Registered User
Join Date: Oct 2005
Posts: 1
|
Your Cure c4c (leave a link please)
 Your Cure Falling Into The hour Of Redemption Right before you cross The finish line I Cant Find a cure For you're InsainX2 Insanity It spreads like a disease That just doesnt want to leave One swift move and you killed my spirit And from the ruins rose my hatred Then I realized I Cant Find a cure For you're InsainX2 Insanity And just like the day You took it all away I am standing here Waiting... (Waiting...) For The cure I cant find For you're InsainX2 Your insain Fits of giggles Bursts of tears Wide eyed intanglement Wishing youd be here But No one can find The one thing you need B/c you are InsainX2 Yeah |
|
|
|
10-18-2005, 04:06 PM
|
#2 |
|
ŞŌPHISTIFÜČK
Join Date: Mar 2005
Location: I live in Circle One.
Posts: 1,631
|
Don't shorten things (b/c) and it's spelled insane. Over all I suppose this isn't too bad, the spacing is really annoying. 5/10.
http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?p=10084528#post10084528 < Crit it. |
|
|
|
|
10-18-2005, 04:12 PM
|
#3 |
|
space
Join Date: Oct 2005
Posts: 4,246
|
i donno, the structure is seriously messed up, and it's nothing new or special, and it's rather cliche. i'd say 4/10.
|
|
|
|
|
10-18-2005, 05:39 PM
|
#4 |
|
Registered User
Join Date: Oct 2002
Posts: 326
|
Can't really read through all of it, and understand it too well. And i actually read it a few times. Just got the point of that theres someone that's insane, and you can't find a cure too it. Or something. But I like " And from the ruins rose my hatred " But i would change hatred.
http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?p=10085392#post10085392 |
|
|
|
|
10-18-2005, 05:41 PM
|
#5 |
|
Banned
Join Date: Oct 2005
Posts: 28
|
hrmm a bit short but nice 5/10
http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=404340 |
|
|
|
|
10-18-2005, 09:42 PM
|
#6 |
|
space
Join Date: Oct 2005
Posts: 4,246
|
i forgot a link for u to crit, if u even do, but if you're bored here u go:
http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=402859 |
|
|
|
|
10-18-2005, 10:06 PM
|
#7 |
|
A Certain Shade of Green
Join Date: Dec 2004
Posts: 98
|
It's a decent song. A bit too short, a bit too choppy. Fix the spacings (I know you're going for effect, but still...). Generic, cliche'd all that jazz. It didn't seem like a lot of thought was put into it.
http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=404485 there's the link to my song. Please don't be burned by my crit and therefore post a burn crit on mine. |
|
|
|
 |
| Thread Tools | Search this Thread |
| Rate This Thread | |
|
|
