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01-02-2005, 09:52 PM
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Until the End
here's a stanza/verse thats more of a poem than lyrics but could easily double. it is real short cause i wrote it while i was bored at work. I plan on writing more to it though. i am proud of it.
critique please born into ignorance and hating the rheotric etching birthdates on death certificates another verse and a chords progression played off cue and in succesion a distorted note and all of its melody a six string symphony played to a tone deaf world |
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01-03-2005, 01:03 AM
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born into ignorance and hating the rheotric
etching birthdates on death certificates ----------------------------------------------------------------* another verse and a chords progression played off cue and in succesion a distorted note and all of its melody a six string symphony played to a tone deaf world Very good, i like it all. *make these two into seperate verses, as they do not flow well in one verse. |
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01-03-2005, 02:40 PM
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good call mate. thanks.
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