My awesome rap (inspired by Maggotfelon)

feedthegods666 · 08-31-2004, 12:14 PM

**if no one noticed the "awesome" in the title was sarcasm**

Staring at this knife, i wonder if i should take my life
tonight, with a slice i could dice my veins
and this glock would be a shock to my brains
staring at this trigger i figure i can survive death
if i sell my soul even though i havent died yet
evereone here knows me, the diseased MC
on dope with a second hand smoke degree
now theres nothing else that we can do
except beat each other black and blue
drill you into the floor like a cheap screw
i tried to get high on five different attempts
thought i got pot or weed, it was just hemp
You can tell im still ill, when im swallowin advil
and seraquel like M & M's
when will this end, im in a straightjacket again
i remember this when i was ten
im actin whack, talkin back
swallowin prozac like i lost my heart and i want it back
please just stab me with a needle
there are too many people
ill burn an upside down cross into the side of a steeple
i run into a stick fight with a machine gun
and blast caps until my team won
if you cant tell ive turned into the mean one
if you'd just have held your tongues
i wouldnt have to had spit this one

Baodegoth · 08-31-2004, 12:24 PM

i have no idea what to say....but since i've read it.....it's cool, i mean it's not that good but....see? i have no idea what to say. well you tried something new that's cool. sorry for the rambling..i'll let someone else do the crit. good effort tho. i guess...6.5/10 should do justice to this....sorry man

feedthegods666 · 08-31-2004, 12:31 PM

yah, i rediscovered Eminem so he kind of forced me to try it. it sounds pretty cool, because my bassist has got this sick riff goin in the background. but yah, this is just my attempt at an intro for a song

Baodegoth · 08-31-2004, 12:57 PM

hmmm...well i can see this as an intro. what genre do you(your band) play? nu-metal..?

feedthegods666 · 08-31-2004, 12:59 PM

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Originally Posted by Baodegoth

hmmm...well i can see this as an intro. what genre do you(your band) play? nu-metal..?

yah definitely nu metal, i get flamed a lot, but its pretty cool stuff

Baodegoth · 08-31-2004, 01:06 PM

cool..i won't flame you cuz i like it too. in fact i'm probably one of the VERY few and rare persons that likes ALMOST every genre of music. from brit-pop(duran-duran, etc) to black metal or doom metal...i even like psychadelic trance...so as you can see i pretty much like ALMOST everything. there are genres i don't like but i guess i can't like 'em all. yep nu-metal is cool, i mean it's like everything else it has some good bands and some bad bands...nothing's perfect.

~~BeautifulButterfly453~~ · 08-31-2004, 01:07 PM

This song makes me want to stab out my eyes for even reading something so dumb.

feedthegods666 · 08-31-2004, 01:07 PM

thanks man, i listen to everything from Loreena McKennitt (gospel singer) Alanis Morisette, Six Pence None The Richer, SlipKnot, KoRn, Eminem, Marilyn Manson....weird stuff

feedthegods666 · 08-31-2004, 01:08 PM

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Originally Posted by BeautifulButterfly453

This song makes me want to stab out my eyes for even reading something so dumb.

...do you have any constructive criticism, because thats what this forum is for

Merkaba · 08-31-2004, 01:10 PM

Well i come from a hip hop background. Its too typical for me. Im tired of hearing this type of stuff. even with the old excuse of I'm just reporting whats going on in the streets, or i'm just venting. Basically if i wanted to hear your rap, all i have to do is go get any rap cd out. well, about 99% of the stuff out. I mean, theres some catchy stuff here and there. but overall, its just too typical and im sure many would agree. I do like the upside down into the side of a steeple line(s). you should lose one of the swallowing, thats repetitive and seems forced. And come on, you cant say glock anymore in a rap. thats just lame. and busting caps is too. at least say something like shed metal, spitting shells like im hockin lugies or something. spitting is still in.
overall, i have to give you a 6. i mean, its nowhere near my rap cup of tee, but based on whats out nowadays, hell if you knew the right person you probably could get on a record!

~~BeautifulButterfly453~~ · 08-31-2004, 01:13 PM

Pixiesfanyoincarnate feedthegods I have been here for almost a year.

I know what the forum is.

It's just this is complete angst ****.

Stop pretending you have a bad life and go hug your mother.

feedthegods666 · 08-31-2004, 01:14 PM

^^^ haha, yah its not that great, it sounds a lot like some of Eminem's stuff, but i dont even like "rap" i just like Eminem and i felt like i needed to add some of his flare into my band so this is what came out

EDIT: to Merkaba-1

feedthegods666 · 08-31-2004, 01:15 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by BeautifulButterfly453

Pixiesfanyoincarnate feedthegods I have been here for almost a year.

I know what the forum is.

It's just this is complete angst ****.

Stop pretending you have a bad life and go hug your mother.

as ive said, if you have constructive criticism, id love to hear it

~~BeautifulButterfly453~~ · 08-31-2004, 01:15 PM

Uhm. Well. You thought wrong.

Baodegoth · 08-31-2004, 01:17 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by feedthegods666

thanks man, i listen to everything from Loreena McKennitt (gospel singer) Alanis Morisette, Six Pence None The Richer, SlipKnot, KoRn, Eminem, Marilyn Manson....weird stuff

lol "Six Pence None The Richer" and me thinking i was the only person that listen to them(not always but now and then i like to hear some of their tunes)

"but based on whats out nowadays, hell if you knew the right person you probably could get on a record!"<---this isn't my thread but i would see this as a compliment.

08-31-2004, 01:56 PM

Pixies is right. This song is so bad I don't know where to begin. Cliche-ridden garbage. What do you want me to say that's constructive? I honestly can't think of anything, that's how bad it is.

A_Perfect_Sonnet · 08-31-2004, 02:25 PM

maggot ill blame you for this, lol... 5/10

08-31-2004, 02:46 PM

Well i thought some parts were amazing and some jsut lame 7/10

08-31-2004, 02:47 PM

also i dont think it could be done fast enough to be classed as a rap, althought the style is rapper like

maggotfelon · 08-31-2004, 03:04 PM

"ill burn an upside down cross into the side of a steeple"

FVCK YEAH BIT.CH!!!!

08-31-2004, 12:14 PM	#1
feedthegods666 JON DAVIS > EVERYONE ELSE Join Date: Jul 2004 Location: right behind you....TURN AROUND!!! Posts: 1,601	My awesome rap (inspired by Maggotfelon) if no one noticed the "awesome" in the title was sarcasm Staring at this knife, i wonder if i should take my life tonight, with a slice i could dice my veins and this glock would be a shock to my brains staring at this trigger i figure i can survive death if i sell my soul even though i havent died yet evereone here knows me, the diseased MC on dope with a second hand smoke degree now theres nothing else that we can do except beat each other black and blue drill you into the floor like a cheap screw i tried to get high on five different attempts thought i got pot or weed, it was just hemp You can tell im still ill, when im swallowin advil and seraquel like M & M's when will this end, im in a straightjacket again i remember this when i was ten im actin whack, talkin back swallowin prozac like i lost my heart and i want it back please just stab me with a needle there are too many people ill burn an upside down cross into the side of a steeple i run into a stick fight with a machine gun and blast caps until my team won if you cant tell ive turned into the mean one if you'd just have held your tongues i wouldnt have to had spit this one Last edited by feedthegods666; 08-31-2004 at 06:10 PM.

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08-31-2004, 12:24 PM	#2
Baodegoth Registered User Join Date: May 2004 Location: Lisbon, PORTUGAL Posts: 638	i have no idea what to say....but since i've read it.....it's cool, i mean it's not that good but....see? i have no idea what to say. well you tried something new that's cool. sorry for the rambling..i'll let someone else do the crit. good effort tho. i guess...6.5/10 should do justice to this....sorry man

08-31-2004, 12:31 PM	#3
feedthegods666 JON DAVIS > EVERYONE ELSE Join Date: Jul 2004 Location: right behind you....TURN AROUND!!! Posts: 1,601	yah, i rediscovered Eminem so he kind of forced me to try it. it sounds pretty cool, because my bassist has got this sick riff goin in the background. but yah, this is just my attempt at an intro for a song

08-31-2004, 12:57 PM	#4
Baodegoth Registered User Join Date: May 2004 Location: Lisbon, PORTUGAL Posts: 638	hmmm...well i can see this as an intro. what genre do you(your band) play? nu-metal..?

08-31-2004, 01:06 PM	#6
Baodegoth Registered User Join Date: May 2004 Location: Lisbon, PORTUGAL Posts: 638	cool..i won't flame you cuz i like it too. in fact i'm probably one of the VERY few and rare persons that likes ALMOST every genre of music. from brit-pop(duran-duran, etc) to black metal or doom metal...i even like psychadelic trance...so as you can see i pretty much like ALMOST everything. there are genres i don't like but i guess i can't like 'em all. yep nu-metal is cool, i mean it's like everything else it has some good bands and some bad bands...nothing's perfect.

08-31-2004, 01:07 PM	#7
~~BeautifulButterfly453~~ Banned Join Date: Aug 2004 Posts: 179	This song makes me want to stab out my eyes for even reading something so dumb.

08-31-2004, 01:10 PM	#10
Merkaba Play-Dough and Rug Hair! Join Date: Jul 2004 Location: With Digger the Dermatophyte Posts: 3,964	Well i come from a hip hop background. Its too typical for me. Im tired of hearing this type of stuff. even with the old excuse of I'm just reporting whats going on in the streets, or i'm just venting. Basically if i wanted to hear your rap, all i have to do is go get any rap cd out. well, about 99% of the stuff out. I mean, theres some catchy stuff here and there. but overall, its just too typical and im sure many would agree. I do like the upside down into the side of a steeple line(s). you should lose one of the swallowing, thats repetitive and seems forced. And come on, you cant say glock anymore in a rap. thats just lame. and busting caps is too. at least say something like shed metal, spitting shells like im hockin lugies or something. spitting is still in. overall, i have to give you a 6. i mean, its nowhere near my rap cup of tee, but based on whats out nowadays, hell if you knew the right person you probably could get on a record!

08-31-2004, 01:13 PM	#11
~~BeautifulButterfly453~~ Banned Join Date: Aug 2004 Posts: 179	Pixiesfanyoincarnate feedthegods I have been here for almost a year. I know what the forum is. It's just this is complete angst ****. Stop pretending you have a bad life and go hug your mother.

08-31-2004, 01:14 PM	#12
feedthegods666 JON DAVIS > EVERYONE ELSE Join Date: Jul 2004 Location: right behind you....TURN AROUND!!! Posts: 1,601	^^^ haha, yah its not that great, it sounds a lot like some of Eminem's stuff, but i dont even like "rap" i just like Eminem and i felt like i needed to add some of his flare into my band so this is what came out EDIT: to Merkaba-1

08-31-2004, 01:15 PM	#14
~~BeautifulButterfly453~~ Banned Join Date: Aug 2004 Posts: 179	Uhm. Well. You thought wrong.

08-31-2004, 01:56 PM	#16
SubtleDagger Guest Posts: n/a	Pixies is right. This song is so bad I don't know where to begin. Cliche-ridden garbage. What do you want me to say that's constructive? I honestly can't think of anything, that's how bad it is.

08-31-2004, 02:25 PM	#17
A_Perfect_Sonnet Greyskull Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: Winchester, VA Posts: 4,039	maggot ill blame you for this, lol... 5/10

08-31-2004, 02:46 PM	#18
UrbanGeek Guest Posts: n/a	Well i thought some parts were amazing and some jsut lame 7/10

08-31-2004, 02:47 PM	#19
UrbanGeek Guest Posts: n/a	also i dont think it could be done fast enough to be classed as a rap, althought the style is rapper like

08-31-2004, 03:04 PM	#20
maggotfelon Wanted:God-Dead or Alive Join Date: May 2004 Location: poor ****hole, connecticut Posts: 1,831	"ill burn an upside down cross into the side of a steeple" FVCK YEAH BIT.CH!!!!