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Old 04-05-2012, 07:48 PM   #1
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Song Lyrics....need more verses

Secrets make it easier
Sometimes they shouldnt know
Lies are always wrong
But can be used for good

And u dont have to like it
but you dont have to know

When nobody knows the trutg
your lies can become you
After awhile u might seem changed
But some things stay the same

And u dont have to like it
But you dont have to know
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Old 04-08-2012, 04:12 AM   #2
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Sounds pretty dramatic and good. You could always make it a short song if you have no more ideas for lyrics.
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Old 04-23-2012, 03:40 AM   #3
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...so dramatic and lonely song: maybe you can give it a title of “White Lies”.
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Old 04-28-2012, 01:23 PM   #4
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Yeah i guess i could just leave it at this then do an instrumental part and end with the repeater parts as a chorus then slow it down and end it.
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Old 05-04-2012, 09:19 PM   #5
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The refrain of "And you don't have to like it / But you don't have to know" is powerful. However, the actual verses sound too straightforward to me; try giving examples of how you feel when you lie, or how you lie, or to whom -- in short, you should add something that gives more depth and offers more of an explanation.
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