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Old 04-08-2012, 12:58 PM   #1
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It had to end like this, didn't it?
From the moment I stepped out into the embrace
Of a non-existent god,
It had to end like this.

I made you a Lady, a pointless title for a stupid 'nation'
Because we liked that kind of thing.
I'm glad it made you smile, like I'm glad my fingers work
Almost as well as that thing that doesn't anymore.
I'm glad I've made you scream
Almost as often as you've cried.

You gave me a pocket watch the day I left you.
I wrap it round my finger, dangle it in front,
Swing it like the pendulum above my neck
Scratching at my beard. "Soon",
It whispers in rustles.
"Too late" I reply as I set it aside

We can't have our time again.
So let me forget all that we didn't do.
So let me forget that which I did.
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Old 04-08-2012, 02:09 PM   #2
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Oh man. I can feel this one sinking in my chest.
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Old 04-08-2012, 03:41 PM   #3
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Absolutely Awesome, I love it.

I take it this was one of those poems that was a real spur of the moment kind of thing and you were feeling highly emotional when you wrote it? (I just know I'm going to look stupid if it wasn't ) Best stuff usually comes round from that.
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Old 04-08-2012, 03:42 PM   #4
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Absolutely Awesome, I love it.

I take it this was one of those poems that was a real spur of the moment kind of thing and you were feeling highly emotional when you wrote it? (I just know I'm going to look stupid if it wasn't ) Best stuff usually comes round from that.
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Old 04-12-2012, 12:57 AM   #5
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Old 04-12-2012, 03:17 AM   #6
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Yes it was, all of my stuff is generally. Thanks.
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Old 04-12-2012, 07:29 AM   #7
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too emo

write more lines about fucking bitches and riding horses while drinking american beer and then get back to me i might have a publishing deal for you
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Old 05-11-2012, 01:51 PM   #8
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The title is slightly misleading lol

Unless your writing style is very covert and subtle; I couldn't really make the connection.

It contradicts my writing style, which is more direct and overt.

But either way, I like it.

What's the idea behind the song? Where did you get the idea?
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Old 05-21-2012, 06:45 AM   #9
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"all that we didn't do" - that's the connection to the title. I wrote this more for my own sake than anything so that's why it was obtuse. Inspiration is my own life.
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Old 05-21-2012, 05:23 PM   #10
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