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Old 09-18-2008, 07:32 AM   #3
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RunAmokRampant - 2

I can't say anything else that Surtr hasn't already said, So just stick with his comment.

Surtr - 1

I don't think you needed to add swearing into this, I know what you're going for is ment to be shocking and swearing is a good way to portray this.

"But dad fucked away" really doesn't seem right at all. Better choices of words could be had here.

Other then that, I like the story and how it progresses and it only just edges out RunAmokRampant maybe because it was just a tad longer.

Guess this was a hard one to do since I can't really say anyones was really good. Hard word indeed.
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