SubtleDagger

LOL hay SD quit banning me it totally sux!!!2

Kevbud - This song pretty much beat me over the head with the point and got old pretty fast. I'm talking after the first stanza, since that's around when I went, "Hey this song is about gold digging probly".
15th

DFelon - Sorry man, but it reads like an encyclopedia, and is just about as poetic aside from the end. I don't care if it will work as a song, just if it works as poetry. I don't really think it does aside from the last stanza. I really do like the last stanza though.
8th

pixies - It's good, but I did tell you that it's just too short for me. Has its moments though.
6th

toddcotham - Well... it has a lot of potential. The lyricism is good, but the imagery and storyline sound like something Stevie Nicks would write. So it sounds a bit pretentious to me. It doesn't really come off that way for the most part though.
5th

RunAmok - Tragically DQed.

super deluxe - I miss super d in here a lot because her songs are usually really good. This is no exception. I'm not a big fan of the overdramatic ending but everything else is aces.
1st

bowl of oranges - It's decent. You need more command of grammar and sentence structure. Has potential though.
9th

SeasonOfTheMind - Starts out okay, but then the forced rhymes start pummeling me. Awful, awful forced rhymes, especially in the third stanza. They're just relentless. No way I can give this a decent standing.
12th

Konrad - Most of it is fine, until I come about that "WARNING" line, which is just way way way too pretentious for me. It's just not at all a clever device in my opinion. Aside from that and the sixth stanza, it's good. but those two areas really need work.
7th

addictedtochaos - :|. Not my sort of thing. You seem to have found your writing style, I'm just not a big fan of it. Too ambiguous and I just don't seem to retain interest.
11th

WhatILiveFor - You came out of nowhere as far as I can tell, but your songs are very good. This is no exception. Good job.
2nd

Corupt - I don't see how you can put all these definitions for "big words" at the top and then use "soul" instead of "sole". And that's just a simple error honestly, you have major structural problems. "Reasoning this happines" makes no sense, "shock" should be "shocked", "rest" is "rests"... I could go on and on but I'll spare you. Work on the simple stuff first and not the complex stuff.
13th

jurial - Good for the most part. Some of it's a bit too cliche for me and some is a bit too lengthy (that's right, I'm complaining that something is "lengthy"). Decent though.
4th

MMPR - Very good, A bit too short. I like your writing.
3rd

k.s.e - I personally thought this just was not interesting enough, which is probably why I saw it and yet completely missed critting it the first time around. I just couldn't really get into it.
10th

Tyrion - Not that hot. Storytelling isn't interesting, imagery isn't good. Meh.
14th

Rushfan - I'm sure I'll be hearing cries of "OMG biased", but your rhymes are forced and you have grammatical and structural problems galore. Wordplay isn't very clever either.
16th