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05-27-2005, 10:37 AM

Kevbud-well, interesting tale…woman marrys for money…classic tale, very interesting…your chorus is weird, borderline forced, or something of that nature (doesn’t sound like a very natural flow to the words)
7/10

DFelon-If you want me to look at this, then it has to be looked upon as a lyric...given it’s a lyrical challenge, therefore, with out knowledge of music and rhythm, I have nothing to judge this upon BUT flow. Otherwise it lacks being a lyric and becomes a story…however, for the time being, Ill look at it…yeah, this is a story… that’s all it is, I owuldn’t know how to fit it into song, nor how to read it as a story…and Three parts with an intro is rather extensive, wouldn’t you say…I mean really, at this point it lacks the intent of going with music, and begins the intent of just becoming a novel (complete with chapters already!)
4/10; good story, not such a good lyric

Pixie fan-short…very short….14 lines of text, that’s it….it needs more, be it filler or whatever, where as the last one I graded was too long, this is to short
5/10

Toddcotham-well, I think this is the most cleverly made suicide story I’ve seen on here…
Though all it is is a suicide story, doesn’t stand apart from anything else one might read on this dreary forum…in rethought, this was cleverly worded, and was interesting to read
7.5/10

SubtleDagger
RunAmokRampant
super deluxe
bowl of oranges
SeasonOfTheMad
xKONRADx
addicted_tochaos
WhatILivefoR
Corupt2057
jurialmunkey
Mighty Morphin Power Ranger
k.s.e.
Tyrion

Would you like anyhting to drink with that?

*more crits later*

05-27-2005, 10:37 AM	#9
Rushfan2112 Guest Posts: n/a	Kevbud-well, interesting tale…woman marrys for money…classic tale, very interesting…your chorus is weird, borderline forced, or something of that nature (doesn’t sound like a very natural flow to the words) 7/10 DFelon-If you want me to look at this, then it has to be looked upon as a lyric...given it’s a lyrical challenge, therefore, with out knowledge of music and rhythm, I have nothing to judge this upon BUT flow. Otherwise it lacks being a lyric and becomes a story…however, for the time being, Ill look at it…yeah, this is a story… that’s all it is, I owuldn’t know how to fit it into song, nor how to read it as a story…and Three parts with an intro is rather extensive, wouldn’t you say…I mean really, at this point it lacks the intent of going with music, and begins the intent of just becoming a novel (complete with chapters already!) 4/10; good story, not such a good lyric Pixie fan-short…very short….14 lines of text, that’s it….it needs more, be it filler or whatever, where as the last one I graded was too long, this is to short 5/10 Toddcotham-well, I think this is the most cleverly made suicide story I’ve seen on here… Though all it is is a suicide story, doesn’t stand apart from anything else one might read on this dreary forum…in rethought, this was cleverly worded, and was interesting to read 7.5/10 SubtleDagger RunAmokRampant super deluxe bowl of oranges SeasonOfTheMad xKONRADx addicted_tochaos WhatILivefoR Corupt2057 jurialmunkey Mighty Morphin Power Ranger k.s.e. Tyrion Would you like anyhting to drink with that? more crits later Last edited by Rushfan2112; 05-27-2005 at 11:11 AM.