kevbud187 - It wasn't good, until you hit the part that calls for 'buying every painting from the museum'. It would have been a bit better, methinks, if you put the final part at the beginning. Linear natures be dam'ned, it'd work better if your story went backwards rather than forward. A lot of the other two verses need tweaking too. 12
DFelon204409 - The last time I listened to a spoken word song was today. Gorillaz - Fire coming out of a monkey's head. I absolutely love the way you've put this. The storyline, the concept, its all good. I dont mind the length cos this is like a box set of good lyrics. ...1
pixiesfanyo - The way you've tied in the story of apartheid is perfect. Its like an inside joke. Thats it biggest strength and its biggest weakness. I'll get back to you. 8
toddcotham - The single line parts hold this together. Could be stronger. 6
SubtleDagger- emokid.
You descend into cliches, which is quite surprising for you. I'd rather your older workings of obscure historical events than this slightly above average song that makes me want to cry 'sellout' and then collapse into a fit of giggles and smirks afterwards. 11
RunAmokRampant - I've figured out what I just couldnt get my finger on as far as you were concerned. While i love your use of language, get each verse to be a line itself, not two. It helps it stick out better rather than be drowned by an equally verbose next line. This I like better than your last. 3
super deluxe - Pretty. The taste, oh god. You managed to get the feel of the situation across pretty well. You Oral person, you.
The ending ties in the sometimes disjointed images quite nicely. 2
bowl of oranges - Nice work. You do need to work on your hooks a wee bit more. The single/double lines arent very stand-out. 7
SeasonOfTheMad- The Unforgiven? No seriously, it fits the style, theme, rythm and feel. I cant critique this fairly because of a sense of deja vu. I'm sorry. 15
xKONRADx - If you lose the Warning sign which is pretty jarring (but might be interesting to see translated into song), its pretty good. 5
addicted_tochaos - Tacos!!!!
WhatILivefoR- Definitely the best new entrant around. Very nice style and technique, feels raw, in a good way. You got the intensity across so there's nothing more to do. 4
Corupt205 - You mentioned the word Nevermore in your song. I officially love you. I'm going to see them at the Gigantour. yay. (ignore) . Your song has a nice concept going, though it doesnt seem to be sure whether it wants to be philosophical or simple and effective. little birdie?? wrong phrase. 10
jurialmunkey - i hereby diagnose you with ADHD. Feels way too breathy. 13
Mighty Morphin Power Ranger - I miss your double entendres. This is okay and has a lovely first verse. 6
k.s.e. - I just dont feel you. Despite the passionate subject, I feel it lacks heart. 9
Tyrion - Feels folksy. And the rhyming works really well within that. Your problem, however, is your storytelling. It lacks heart and seems to revolve many average ideas around a really good one. 14
Rushfan2112 - NO. After all the drama in the replies thread, I figured there'd at least be a good song to back up the rhetoric. 16
IS THAT ALL YOU'VE GOT?