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xKONRADx · 05-26-2005, 09:20 PM

I wish I were an Oscar Meyer Winner

kevbud187-ok, change the first few lines. and other stuff but all these crits will be short. if you wrote the whole thing like you did the last verse this would be great.

DFelon204409- i like it when people experiment with new styles and formats, but the doesnt mean i always like the results. it just read too much like a story. i know that it can work with music, as you explained but you have to write to the audience if you want a good score.

pixiesfanyo-ending was weak. very short, but it was good, except the ending. like i said.

toddcotham-i dont know waht to think right now. hm....

SubtleDagger- its fine, but i really wish you would change your style. i must say though that i really liked the part at the end there. nice.

RunAmokRampant- NO CHALLENGE WORD... but good imagery, but the story isnt interesting.

super deluxe-mediocrity in lyrical challenges is more like it. actually ive liked yours the best so far, but what is this it seems like nobody is up to par. actually, rereading yours its really good.

bowl of oranges-keep us on our honest toes? ok... yep the rest of the song is more of the same. i just didnt like your writing style, the story behind it wasnt bad though.

SeasonOfTheMad-the grave/slave/saved part put me off right away. endless green? ok im done here.

xKONRADx- STFU you suck too.

addicted_tochaos-at least youve still got it. other than your use of the challenge word the song was great. hmm you or super deluxe for number one??? i wonder who is more inclined to put out?

WhatILivefoR-whilst? are you serious. ok. i must be in a bad mood. good thing im doing all these at the same time so its fair. i guess i dont like some of your word choices, but i can see alot of good qualities. i can imagine it being sung, even though there is no real structure. so thats good.

Corupt2057-some parts were good, others werent. more bad than good at the end there.

jurialmunkey-wtf. am i just reading these all backwards or something? dont get me wrong. its not bad, but its not good. i guess it must be contagious

Mighty Morphin Power Ranger-that actually wasnt bad. i didnt like it a whole lot though. suprize. i hope people arent just reading thier crits cause then theyll think im just being a jackass to them. but everyone is feeling the heat. so dont feel special. actually id have liked it if it were longer. paper airplanes was a good line.

k.s.e.- youre getting 3rd place. be happy.

Tyrion-compared to your other stuff this is not very good.

Rushfan2112-very plain. very.

RANKS - yet to be determined
11-kevbud187
7-DFelon204409
6-pixiesfanyo
5-toddcotham
4-SubtleDagger
1-super deluxe
12-bowl of oranges
13-SeasonOfTheMad
0-xKONRADx
2-addicted_tochaos
14-WhatILivefoR
10-Corupt2057
9-jurialmunkey
8-Mighty Morphin Power Ranger
3-k.s.e.
16-Tyrion

15-Rushfan2112

05-26-2005, 09:20 PM	#5
xKONRADx The Chosen Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Fûck Feûdalism Posts: 1,847	I wish I were an Oscar Meyer Winner kevbud187-ok, change the first few lines. and other stuff but all these crits will be short. if you wrote the whole thing like you did the last verse this would be great. DFelon204409- i like it when people experiment with new styles and formats, but the doesnt mean i always like the results. it just read too much like a story. i know that it can work with music, as you explained but you have to write to the audience if you want a good score. pixiesfanyo-ending was weak. very short, but it was good, except the ending. like i said. toddcotham-i dont know waht to think right now. hm.... SubtleDagger- its fine, but i really wish you would change your style. i must say though that i really liked the part at the end there. nice. RunAmokRampant- NO CHALLENGE WORD... but good imagery, but the story isnt interesting. super deluxe-mediocrity in lyrical challenges is more like it. actually ive liked yours the best so far, but what is this it seems like nobody is up to par. actually, rereading yours its really good. bowl of oranges-keep us on our honest toes? ok... yep the rest of the song is more of the same. i just didnt like your writing style, the story behind it wasnt bad though. SeasonOfTheMad-the grave/slave/saved part put me off right away. endless green? ok im done here. xKONRADx- STFU you suck too. addicted_tochaos-at least youve still got it. other than your use of the challenge word the song was great. hmm you or super deluxe for number one??? i wonder who is more inclined to put out? WhatILivefoR-whilst? are you serious. ok. i must be in a bad mood. good thing im doing all these at the same time so its fair. i guess i dont like some of your word choices, but i can see alot of good qualities. i can imagine it being sung, even though there is no real structure. so thats good. Corupt2057-some parts were good, others werent. more bad than good at the end there. jurialmunkey-wtf. am i just reading these all backwards or something? dont get me wrong. its not bad, but its not good. i guess it must be contagious Mighty Morphin Power Ranger-that actually wasnt bad. i didnt like it a whole lot though. suprize. i hope people arent just reading thier crits cause then theyll think im just being a jackass to them. but everyone is feeling the heat. so dont feel special. actually id have liked it if it were longer. paper airplanes was a good line. k.s.e.- youre getting 3rd place. be happy. Tyrion-compared to your other stuff this is not very good. Rushfan2112-very plain. very. RANKS - yet to be determined 11-kevbud187 7-DFelon204409 6-pixiesfanyo 5-toddcotham 4-SubtleDagger 1-super deluxe 12-bowl of oranges 13-SeasonOfTheMad 0-xKONRADx 2-addicted_tochaos 14-WhatILivefoR 10-Corupt2057 9-jurialmunkey 8-Mighty Morphin Power Ranger 3-k.s.e. 16-Tyrion 15-Rushfan2112 Last edited by xKONRADx; 06-03-2005 at 02:40 PM.