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RunAmokRampant · 04-26-2005, 12:57 AM

Corupt2057 8/10 1st
This would work really well in one of those epic 20 minute prog-rock classic songs mainly due to it's length. But when without music to keep interest, I find it a chore to have to read your's from start to finish. Although it really isnt that long, your repeated chorus' clutter it up. Materials and content is well thought out. It maybe lengthy but not worthless.

Mr. Hankie 5/10 8th
The chorus stutters way to much especially when it is a chorus. IMO choruses need to flow well and this just does the opposite. Content a bit superficial, doesn't really go into depth much at all.

Disco Dragon 7.5/10 2nd
I really like this one. Untitled? I suppose it doesn't really matter, this is a quite a unique song within a pretty straight forward structural scheme. This has a modern feel to it I think.

6945 7/10 6th
Another quite interesting piece. Stays on track of the topic which is good. Sounds a bit robotic though with the larger words and short lines.

Rushfan2112 7/10 3rd
I like this. Some spelling errors could be easily avoided but other than that is a overall nice song with the challenge word basically the topic. Did it nicely.

SeasonOfTheMad 7/10 5th
Not bad for a first entry. At times a bit cliche "a man only reaps the seeds he has sewn", but you extend it further on the next line so I suppose thats good. Lots of imagery, maybe a bit too much in places especially the "rivers of faces...." stanza. Not a bad entry.

super deluxe 3/10 9th
This amused me for about 3 seconds, so thats the score you get.

JurialMunkey 6.5/10 7th
The first time I read this I liked it, but now I find it a bit silly. I feel that the tone isnt quite as serious as it should be except for the "At least.." stanza which I quite enjoyed reading. "At least I'm an important chess piece, drifting in amongst chequered paranoia". Love that line. You still can create some decent lines, but this song doesn't feel right. I like ambigious songs but I find this a bit.... random maybe?

addicted tochoas 7/10 4th
I find this pretty good, some parts dont feel right "across my bitten lip,
There is no hurt.". Maybe change hurt to pain might sound better. "And some distant tree falls.." hmm dunno why but I like this... makes me think to what your talking about but I sense the relevance to the topic. Good effort.

04-26-2005, 12:57 AM	#3
RunAmokRampant Planeteer 4 life Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Melbourne, Australia Posts: 4,949	Corupt2057 8/10 1st This would work really well in one of those epic 20 minute prog-rock classic songs mainly due to it's length. But when without music to keep interest, I find it a chore to have to read your's from start to finish. Although it really isnt that long, your repeated chorus' clutter it up. Materials and content is well thought out. It maybe lengthy but not worthless. Mr. Hankie 5/10 8th The chorus stutters way to much especially when it is a chorus. IMO choruses need to flow well and this just does the opposite. Content a bit superficial, doesn't really go into depth much at all. Disco Dragon 7.5/10 2nd I really like this one. Untitled? I suppose it doesn't really matter, this is a quite a unique song within a pretty straight forward structural scheme. This has a modern feel to it I think. 6945 7/10 6th Another quite interesting piece. Stays on track of the topic which is good. Sounds a bit robotic though with the larger words and short lines. Rushfan2112 7/10 3rd I like this. Some spelling errors could be easily avoided but other than that is a overall nice song with the challenge word basically the topic. Did it nicely. SeasonOfTheMad 7/10 5th Not bad for a first entry. At times a bit cliche "a man only reaps the seeds he has sewn", but you extend it further on the next line so I suppose thats good. Lots of imagery, maybe a bit too much in places especially the "rivers of faces...." stanza. Not a bad entry. super deluxe 3/10 9th This amused me for about 3 seconds, so thats the score you get. JurialMunkey 6.5/10 7th The first time I read this I liked it, but now I find it a bit silly. I feel that the tone isnt quite as serious as it should be except for the "At least.." stanza which I quite enjoyed reading. "At least I'm an important chess piece, drifting in amongst chequered paranoia". Love that line. You still can create some decent lines, but this song doesn't feel right. I like ambigious songs but I find this a bit.... random maybe? addicted tochoas 7/10 4th I find this pretty good, some parts dont feel right "across my bitten lip, There is no hurt.". Maybe change hurt to pain might sound better. "And some distant tree falls.." hmm dunno why but I like this... makes me think to what your talking about but I sense the relevance to the topic. Good effort. Last edited by RunAmokRampant; 04-29-2005 at 01:55 AM.