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Mr. Hankie - exactly what addicted_tochoas said
Rank 8

Disco Dragon - Critiqued in S&L I'm not too keen on the way the you fit the challenge word in here just because I knew what it was before and I don't think that it works as well however I'm not going to hold it agianst you too much because its still in context with where your taking the ending if that makes any sense to anyone
Rank 2

RunAmokRampant - I thought this was very creative, you have to read it as a story to understand it and stories work really well as songs alot of the time. I only have 2 nitpicks one is the word 'grudgingly' I'm sure when it's sung you can easily put the sound of aggression into it but I felt it was just bleh because of the contrast of its sound. and the other is 'prick the skin' I just felt it needed more aggressiveness. but like I said I liked this and only had nitpicks
Rank 1

6945 - I really liked the first verse has a Linkin Park feel to it (from me that's a compliment (so I dunno how you will take it)) and the chorus was cool the disappear part confused me at first as to whom or what you were talking about 'you' disappearing or the 'dawn in the mirror'. The last line of the one verse 'Kick some serious ass I didn't much care for but it flowed with it well but still it doesn't sit that well in my opinion. The last verse was pretty tight man. and like everyone else said 'Put dawn in the mirror' nice phrase
Rank 3

Rushfan2112 - I really liked your chorus the 3rd and 4th lines of it are very catchy however the some parts in the verses would get stopped by some awkward wording like "so while we move so fast" coming of the line prior to it it seemed forced but not to bad I think a slight wording adjustment can easily clear that up. I like the way you tied this up at the end.
Rank 5

SeasonOfTheMad - The chorus was good had a very nice rocking tone to it. 'soap made of ease' I apologize but this was just lame and in my opinion forced I honestly think you can sacrifice one rhyme cause all the other 3 in the verse will make up for it. Last 2 lines of last verse were very nice.
Rank 6

super deluxe - cute. referring to your crit on my piece, I think I would actually consider it a critique if you read for content and not just read for the rhyme at the end of the line. that's your downfall
Rank 9

jurialmunkey - Sorry just not my flavor (I do like your others just not this one)
Rank 7

addicted_tochoas -
"In my head, I am God
and I have no believers.
I dont need followers."
I really like this but I felt it lacked another line suggestion is "To lead their demise". I know you explained what all this meant to everyone that was confused in the replies section but I didn't read it cause I want to give it an honest opinion not the aftermath of author's notes ya know. Anyways Everything made sense to me up until 'In your face' ok maybe at this point you're talking about facing the real God? dunno.. and the last two lines in my opinion I don't think they fit well with it just because it left me confused.. I liked this piece but I think the ending needs to be re-worked
Rank 4

Note: The ranks 4-6 were tough to judge because I liked the pieces but there was atleast something or a couple of things in them to bring them down or that I didn't like