Rushfan2112

Runamokrampant-Wolf disguised jackal, I dunno, this one threw up question marks for me...isn't a wolf a jackal, there for there is no disquise? Meh, thats my thought
7/10
5th


Pixiesfanyo
"this embryo will soon erase" What?!?! This sense no makes! that killed it for me
5/10
9th

Bigbadbob
“This one is a dreamer
With no conscience to compete
The asking is the taking”
I don't quite get this line. a dreamer has no will to compete? thats what i got out of it, but that doesn't work.
8/10
2nd

A perfect sonnet- OK, but I don't understand how the lyrics and the title fit...
"misery’s claws tore at her chest" way to overdramatic...
5/10
8th

Corupt2057-eye of the beholder...way to clichjed and obvious to use, but a good lyric here
8/10
3rd

Apartofmegetsore-way to much wishing, overusage over word valentine, little flow, uncreative, bleh, not a fan
4/10
10th

LostCosmanaut
"like a.m. yelling screams" Do mornings yell at you, they don't yell at me? "We'll fill our plaster with cracks" Fill our cracks with plaster....maybe we should fill our moneys with banks and fill our clothes with closets? You suck here. "of our forgotten dreams" maybe you forgot the dream because you were trying to figure out how to crack plasters....
yes, all this and you didnt use the word, your not even listed, but making fun of this horrible lyric has made my day
-15/10
0th

Thepurplewater-not quite sure why the guy is fat, and how that relates, but otherwise this is ok.
7/10
4th


Addicted tochaos-good, but seems like challenege word was forced in here
6/10
6th


Careyb-this and that, not very thoughtful there. And. its only my opinion, but lyrics should have rhymes somewhere, i didnt catch any...
6/10
7th


kse-can't find a problem, other than it may have been turned in late?
9/10
1st