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RunAmokRampant · 12-08-2004, 04:42 AM

dfelon204409 3rd
Very nice piece. Your use of vocabulary is good and fits well with the structure of the song. Took me few reads to get a good grasping of the concept of the song but overall a decent effort

RunAmokRampant

6945 2nd
Very unusual piece I must say. Effective nonetheless and I only needed to read it once to understand the meaning. You gave a common theme a new fresh approach

I Am Vikingcore 9th
The angry short bursts of words is effective to about halfway, the becomes a bit monotonous which ceases the effect it had. Otherwise an ok effort

addicted_tochaos 8th
I like your reference to Subway. A good piece sort of amongst the middle score. Thats pretty good considering this challenge had decent lyrics from all competiters. Its not amazing or as a much of a standout but nothing is wrong with it that I can pick out.

xKONRADx 6th
I like the religious passages in this song. Not used too much and the last part ends the song well leaving readers/listeners something to think about. nicely done.

d0ped0g 1st
The only problem I have with this song is the constant 4 lines in each stanza structure. Not willing to take some risks with some oddities in the structure which would make the piece more appealing because it looks bland and boring if it wasn't for the bolded text and the quote at the beginning and the 2 line part at the end. But lyrically good choice of wording and I ingored the occasional mistake in punctuation because this deserves to win

jurialmunkey 4th
Beautifully made piece this one. Nice and appealing structure and a nice flow of words. But I'm a bit lost to what the meaning is. Im assuming then its open to interpretation.

Subtledagger 7th
Hmmm a very violent piece. Very dark and brooding. You use some depressive words and also use the rose to give a nice effect in contrast to the rest of the song which is decent. Hard to score, because it depend in what mood i'm in whether depressed or happy.

Buzzrat 10th
I dont understand your partriotic part in this song. I dont find it relevant to the rest of the song which I found you need to develop further. Its too straight forward and the structure is quite different and I am unabe to decide whether its good or bad

Pixiesfanyo 5th
A nice piece butnI found it a bit vague but with a nice words you use, I'm able to picture what the songs saying. Not sure what its meaning is but nice imagery used

12-08-2004, 04:42 AM	#8
RunAmokRampant Planeteer 4 life Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Melbourne, Australia Posts: 4,949	dfelon204409 3rd Very nice piece. Your use of vocabulary is good and fits well with the structure of the song. Took me few reads to get a good grasping of the concept of the song but overall a decent effort RunAmokRampant 6945 2nd Very unusual piece I must say. Effective nonetheless and I only needed to read it once to understand the meaning. You gave a common theme a new fresh approach I Am Vikingcore 9th The angry short bursts of words is effective to about halfway, the becomes a bit monotonous which ceases the effect it had. Otherwise an ok effort addicted_tochaos 8th I like your reference to Subway. A good piece sort of amongst the middle score. Thats pretty good considering this challenge had decent lyrics from all competiters. Its not amazing or as a much of a standout but nothing is wrong with it that I can pick out. xKONRADx 6th I like the religious passages in this song. Not used too much and the last part ends the song well leaving readers/listeners something to think about. nicely done. d0ped0g 1st The only problem I have with this song is the constant 4 lines in each stanza structure. Not willing to take some risks with some oddities in the structure which would make the piece more appealing because it looks bland and boring if it wasn't for the bolded text and the quote at the beginning and the 2 line part at the end. But lyrically good choice of wording and I ingored the occasional mistake in punctuation because this deserves to win jurialmunkey 4th Beautifully made piece this one. Nice and appealing structure and a nice flow of words. But I'm a bit lost to what the meaning is. Im assuming then its open to interpretation. Subtledagger 7th Hmmm a very violent piece. Very dark and brooding. You use some depressive words and also use the rose to give a nice effect in contrast to the rest of the song which is decent. Hard to score, because it depend in what mood i'm in whether depressed or happy. Buzzrat 10th I dont understand your partriotic part in this song. I dont find it relevant to the rest of the song which I found you need to develop further. Its too straight forward and the structure is quite different and I am unabe to decide whether its good or bad Pixiesfanyo 5th A nice piece butnI found it a bit vague but with a nice words you use, I'm able to picture what the songs saying. Not sure what its meaning is but nice imagery used Last edited by RunAmokRampant; 12-11-2004 at 02:08 AM.