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ATC · 12-07-2004, 05:42 AM

dfelon204409
RunAmokRampant
6945
I Am Vikingcore
addicted_tochaos
xKONRADx
d0ped0g
jurialmunkey
Subtledagger
Buzzrat
Pixiesfanyo

we who are about to vote salute you!

dfelon- good work. i do love a great opening piece for a challenge.
i especially love the little couplet and the solitary line along with
the stanza before it. i cant seem to find a common thread to it is all
that i find lacking...3

runamok- its good, middle metallica-ish. but i think the chorus lets you
down a little. i know it fits in, however. make it a little stronger
in terms of the basic theme portrayal. while good, its not emotional
enough on its own without the song...8

6945- as usual, i like your song. no surprises there. funk-ay... 2

i am vikingcore- symphony of souls, the title reminded me of hybrid megadeth.
symphony of destruction + tornado of souls. lyrically not amazing, but
i reckon musically it would be pretty heavy, just like you intend.
i find it flows exactly to the tune of symphony of destruction. intended?..9, the most singable, but i cant get the megadeth thing out of it. sorry.

addicted_tochaos- get off your lazy as$ and write your dam'n essay.

konrad- i likey. hebrew/aramaic in a song is something i'd like to hear.
the " " parts are nicely done...6

d0ped0g- its like a good poet got entangled in a livejournal-reading girlfriend.
it's really good, in parts. if its meant to wax and wane, then

i like the way two lines per stanza are angsty and two lines are lyrical...5

jmunk- nice way to begin. whisper to scream and back again. moth to flame
thing's done well. a little contradiction does not hurt, so meh..4

subtle -the italic parts are nice and intense. the rest isnt always. it
gets there towards the end, but you could do well with a few changes
to the first stanza. still good...7

buzzrat- spelling errors abound. but i get your point, so eh.
it doesnt flow or feel right. i can't really see the linkage of patriotic
ardor to anything else, which was the topic of your piece. sorry. ..10..coherence, baby.

pixies - was that childbirth? its pretty well written. me likes. ...1, easily first. gotta love them placenta songs. creepier lightning crashes.

12-07-2004, 05:42 AM	#1
ATC Thru leaves,over bridges Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: Vancouver, BC Posts: 6,731	Challenge 79 Voting dfelon204409 RunAmokRampant 6945 I Am Vikingcore addicted_tochaos xKONRADx d0ped0g jurialmunkey Subtledagger Buzzrat Pixiesfanyo we who are about to vote salute you! dfelon- good work. i do love a great opening piece for a challenge. i especially love the little couplet and the solitary line along with the stanza before it. i cant seem to find a common thread to it is all that i find lacking...3 runamok- its good, middle metallica-ish. but i think the chorus lets you down a little. i know it fits in, however. make it a little stronger in terms of the basic theme portrayal. while good, its not emotional enough on its own without the song...8 6945- as usual, i like your song. no surprises there. funk-ay... 2 i am vikingcore- symphony of souls, the title reminded me of hybrid megadeth. symphony of destruction + tornado of souls. lyrically not amazing, but i reckon musically it would be pretty heavy, just like you intend. i find it flows exactly to the tune of symphony of destruction. intended?..9, the most singable, but i cant get the megadeth thing out of it. sorry. addicted_tochaos- get off your lazy as$ and write your dam'n essay. konrad- i likey. hebrew/aramaic in a song is something i'd like to hear. the " " parts are nicely done...6 d0ped0g- its like a good poet got entangled in a livejournal-reading girlfriend. it's really good, in parts. if its meant to wax and wane, then i like the way two lines per stanza are angsty and two lines are lyrical...5 jmunk- nice way to begin. whisper to scream and back again. moth to flame thing's done well. a little contradiction does not hurt, so meh..4 subtle -the italic parts are nice and intense. the rest isnt always. it gets there towards the end, but you could do well with a few changes to the first stanza. still good...7 buzzrat- spelling errors abound. but i get your point, so eh. it doesnt flow or feel right. i can't really see the linkage of patriotic ardor to anything else, which was the topic of your piece. sorry. ..10..coherence, baby. pixies - was that childbirth? its pretty well written. me likes. ...1, easily first. gotta love them placenta songs. creepier lightning crashes. Last edited by addicted_tochaos; 12-11-2004 at 06:33 AM.