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Old 11-06-2004, 12:26 AM   #16
morrissey
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I like this song, though it is short and could definitely be expanded on. I like your rhyme scheme, it doesn't sound to cheesy or forced. You offer some good imagery (the line "sunlight bleeding" is very good), and overall I do enjoy this song, it flows well.

Overall 7.8/10
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