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Old 11-05-2004, 11:13 PM   #15
amp7325
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I think the song is pretty good. Although it's kinda short, I don't really see anything that jumps out at me as not belonging in the song. However, right before the second chorus, "It chills me to my every bone." Maybe use another word instead of bone, because the chorus starts out with bone. Maybe "It chills me to my very core" or something like that.
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