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walking through the pieces of my shattered life
i find a shard of the things i did in spite
of the fact that what i was doing was wrong
and i regret it now that its said and done
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The first two lines rhyme, which was a general theme for your verses...but "wrong" and "done" don't rhyme, I suggest fixing that.
I like everything else though...but...may I suggest making the verses or chorus longer?
It seemed a bit too short.
and for
pixiesfanyo...
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You should entitle this song "Crawling" since Linkin' Park already made it.
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I know that song, and this isn't like it. So stop hatin'.
Nice job
PbEknight777
8.5/10
Later for you.