xkonradx- intriguing. *holds breath anyway*. not poetic to be poetic, not song-y enough to be a song. but i like. in a weird way that you like avant-garde french art. or weird performance art. more grey poupon?
a perfect sonnet- i find the fast breathy whisper part to not fit the song. you should have made it a despairing look at erosion of life, values, whatever. ps: i can see the connection, just not mine. the whole 'they', 'cold' and a bunch of other images seem to suggest that. if you exclude that and look at the song itself, its sketchy with redeeming moments. i recommend you check out nevermore.
your allusion to you as a rose, nice.
pixies- short but oh so sweet. dredg to me.
disco- first off, nice use of the challenge word. very nice images, coherent. but i dunno, something missing.
ta'ao- please, please avoid scat imagery, if that was what the **** was. its a pretty interesting piece. some unnecessary elements in the first verse but it straightens out. not a universal incubus.
deathapalooza- nicely flowing piece which could very easily get to radio. my only gripe is that ts maybe too simple and easy, not that its a bad thing, but add a second layer and you're set.
trail- as spoken word, maybe. as song, not entirely.
losersk8- will vote for scotch.
eleven- hmm doesnt work for me.
subtle- good. somedays love. remember the chocolates that you dont remember cos they were great? its kinda like that. doubt the replay value on this one. still, dam'ned good.
mmpr- double homocide? i loved the verse with all the glads. absolutely loved it. its intriguing since it might even imply suicide to complete the double thing. doublethink. funky nice.
ps: you're republican with a sense of humor, arent you? say yes and i vote you last. say no and you get first.
linsey- you're not re-inventing the wheel here, but its a good attempt. could work easily, flows, structure etc. very ordered. one more layer/ an intriguing line...
chips- like you said, hurried. why would a bottle of scotch help you extract vengeance on an alcoholic? obviously, easier to fcuk, murder, whatever..but do you need it? kinda makes the use of the challenge word
seem...hmm. unless the bottle is a metaphor for your *****, in which case..
take your time, hurry up, the next challenge, the choice is yours, dont be late.
addicted_tochaos- i love myself and want to die.