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sketchyjoe · 10-20-2004, 06:10 AM

6495: Your song starts well and you get your point accross. The rhyme scheme works well but after this he song goes downhill. The chorus seems a bit boring and you seem to be putting phrases in just because you think they sound cool. 7th
pixiesfanyo: I liked this song. The imagery is good and the cyclical structure works well. 4th
A_Perfect_Sonnet: Your message comes across well but some of the images are a bit stale. The song suffers in the middle from the change in rhyme scheme but at the end it picks up again. 8th
hotcod32: I didn't like this. It was just too repetitive and the subject didn't really do it for me. 11th
Disco Dragon: I liked this song as well. There is a lot of alliteration that works well. The song has a good progression and the vocabulary and imagery is very evocative. 3rd
zeppelinfan2k3: This song was good. There was a lot of good alliteration and vocabulary. The rhyme scheme worked really well as well. 2nd
ta'ao: You stick to your chosen form well but the Shakespearean sonnet with an Iambic Pentameter is just too overdone in my opinion. The subject matter isn't particularly inspiring either. 9th
addicted_tochaos: I really liked some sections of this but others weren't so good. The subject matter is well-worn but you still manage to find some original things to say about it. 5th
DFelon204009: Great. A really original song that conjures up a clear image of the situation you're describing. The use of humour and asides work brilliantly as well. 1st
sketchyjoe: Well I liked it.
green day punk: It's pretty standard stuff and some of your metaphors are very cheesy. 10th
SubtleDagger: The imagery and repetition worked well but this song just didn't do it for me. 6th

10-20-2004, 06:10 AM	#9
sketchyjoe GREAT GOOGA-MOOGA! Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Desolation Row, London Posts: 16,271	6495: Your song starts well and you get your point accross. The rhyme scheme works well but after this he song goes downhill. The chorus seems a bit boring and you seem to be putting phrases in just because you think they sound cool. 7th pixiesfanyo: I liked this song. The imagery is good and the cyclical structure works well. 4th A_Perfect_Sonnet: Your message comes across well but some of the images are a bit stale. The song suffers in the middle from the change in rhyme scheme but at the end it picks up again. 8th hotcod32: I didn't like this. It was just too repetitive and the subject didn't really do it for me. 11th Disco Dragon: I liked this song as well. There is a lot of alliteration that works well. The song has a good progression and the vocabulary and imagery is very evocative. 3rd zeppelinfan2k3: This song was good. There was a lot of good alliteration and vocabulary. The rhyme scheme worked really well as well. 2nd ta'ao: You stick to your chosen form well but the Shakespearean sonnet with an Iambic Pentameter is just too overdone in my opinion. The subject matter isn't particularly inspiring either. 9th addicted_tochaos: I really liked some sections of this but others weren't so good. The subject matter is well-worn but you still manage to find some original things to say about it. 5th DFelon204009: Great. A really original song that conjures up a clear image of the situation you're describing. The use of humour and asides work brilliantly as well. 1st sketchyjoe: Well I liked it. green day punk: It's pretty standard stuff and some of your metaphors are very cheesy. 10th SubtleDagger: The imagery and repetition worked well but this song just didn't do it for me. 6th Last edited by sketchyjoe; 10-21-2004 at 01:32 PM.