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I make comments before I vote.
6495 - There's some nice vocab, and then there are some extremely generic lines. Half the time you sound pretty good, the other half you sound like Linkin Park.
Rank: 6th
pixiesfanyo - It's alright, some decent imagery, nice little metaphors. "Insectifuge" felt like a bit much. Pretty good.
Rank: 2nd
A_Perfect_Sonnet - I think if you're going to attempt a rhyme scheme, you better make sure everything has a semblance of rhyming and a good flow. This has neither, really. Some nice imagery, and nothing too special past that.
Rank: 8th
hotcod32 - Nothing that felt worthy of reading. It may work in song format, but it does not work lyrically.
Rank: 10th
Disco Dragon - Pretty good, but I think the third stanza just feels uber-lame. Nothing overly spectacular, some pretty good lines once in a while, though.
Rank: 3rd
zeppelinfan2k3 - It's alright, a lot of it feels like too blunt of a message. The first lines of stanzas feel pretty silly in the present tense, and with no room to elaborate. I guess it's pretty good, it just feels a bit too typical for this sort of song.
Rank: 5th
ta'ao - Good, but too short and lacking in anything I haven't seen done a million times. The last time somebody did a soonet, it was like this, except worse. I still am seriously tired of this method of writing, though.
Rank: 4th
addicted_tochaos - Feels like an Evanescance song. Too many damn pronouns for most of the piece, to the point that you're not really saying anything profound most of the time. I guess some of the metaphors are alright, but they're just thrown out there for no real reason.
Rank: 7th
DFelon204409 - Wow, this is good. It's obvious that about half of this is just boring storytelling, but you manage to use that to your advantage. The message is just perfect, it sort of transcends all the angsty stuff I have to read.
Rank: 1st
sketchyjoe - May work as a song, not lyrically significant in any way. The forced rhyming grates on my nerves, too.
Rank: 9th
green day punker - Hahaha. Typical high school poetry. Nothing special or of worth.
Rank: 11th
And me, I'm the best.
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